The Forest

Hello pal! I have one question before I start-du u know da wey?

Ok, in all seriousness I really liked this poem, especially for the vague prompt that we used :p

I really liked the imagery in your third stanza, but I feel that it's kind of rushed. I kept re-reading it hoping to find some more, but I never really found it, you know? I feel like you could have done more with it if you hadn't focused on making every line the same-ish length (if that makes sense?). I still really liked the picture you painted there, and I wouldn't worry to much about it.

What an ending, 10/10 last stanza!

I liked the way you used broken fragments. It's an artistic choice that I personally think suited this poem, because it helped make it almost dreamlike, like little snapshots of this man succumbing to the forest.

Overall, I really liked this poem! You should write poetry more often, I would love to read more from you. Your imagery and style in this poem were great, and I really enjoyed reading it. Keep writing!

ella

Hello PeijiRestoration,

I, for one, loved this poem. To me, it represents, going with the flow, and letting fate takes its course. {But every reader's view is different, so I don't know if that's what you actually intended. }

Also, I loved how you used sound devices such as alliteration, assonance, and consonance to make the poem flow better. The pacing was good, too. This was so easy and pleasant to read, I love it.

I don't know if you meant to make it this way, but you have a lot of uncapitalized words that are supposed to be capitalized. But if you actually meant it this way, that's fine. It actually makes it look better.

Great job!

~sjdwrite

I think this was, no, is a great piece of work. Especially for the prompt in the club.
The verses move very freely and it just fits together, like a puzzle piece. I hope to hear more of these from you.

Hey I'm just gonna leave a review here. I love this poem. The way you described everything was just so beautiful. It makes your poem almost real and i could see it. Your poetry is so good and I love your work. I hope you can write and post more!!

Hi hi I am here for a quick moment and to say hi. HI.
Anyways this is a review of your poem and in all aspects I like it. To me it seems like it has a little bit of darkness to it but also as if it is the aspect of a tree who has been in the forest for a long time. The fact that it seems like it is about a tree makes it all the better to me at least. So all in all its a good poem and I see nothing wrong with it at all and good work. I hope you have a good time and have fun writing keep up the good work and remember have fun.