If you only knew
how much I cried
Would you still treat me this way?
Would you still hate me?
If you only knew
how much I'm honest
Would you continue to call me a lier?
Would you still not believe me?
If you only knew
how much my heart burns
Would you tell me that you love me?
Would you pretend to be above me?
If you only knew
how much my eyes have seen
Would you still call me innocent?
Would you still say I'm a child?
If you only knew
how much life was taken from me
Would you still call me lively?
Would you want to be with me still?
If you only knew
how much pain I've been through
Would you still tell me I'm not hurting?
Would you still pull me through it?
If you only knew
how much i can't trust
Would you still trust me?
Would you try to heal me?
If only you knew,
would i still be with you?
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Amazing, that was a really brilliant piece of work. just a suggestion, but maybe you should put in some question marks in the appropriate places and caps. Other than that, I can't really find any mistakes.
Amazing, that was a really brilliant piece of work. just a suggestion, but maybe you should put in some question marks in the appropriate places and caps. Other than that, I can't really find any mistakes.
wow! This is absolutely brilliant! The only thing i advise is to go over it and reedit it with capitals in the correct places and puncuation
Also, in the second para. you spelled liar wrong.
-Sara