The Mask
Oh why is everyone staring?
Was it something I said?
Oh why is everyone loathing?
They know i'm playing pretend
I don’t want to have all the strength to talk to you,
I just wish you’d talk to me
I know it’d be better if I did it for you
But through this mask I can’t see
Another broken promise,
Another deny
Any more left turns I take
Is gonna make me faint
Brothers, Mother and father
I wish that you knew
Your son is not himself
He is lost behind a mask
I can’t take it off
It’s stuck to me
I just want freedom
Free from the mask
I can’t break it off
I cannot see
This man i’ve become
Take off the mask
Oh this mask has influence
It’s starting to change
Oh this mask has no purpose
Becoming my face
And I don’t even know why I put it on,
Maybe to mask the insecurities
Maybe to mask all the anxiety
But those made up who I truly was
I can’t take it off
It’s stuck to me
I just want freedom
Free from the mask
I won’t break it off
I cannot see
This man i’ve become
Take off the mask
Not like I have a choice,
If I could, i’d never put it on again
It’s a subconscious voice
That commands my hand
Not like the way I said
I didn’t mean what I spoke to you, in those words
It’s coming on again
It commands my hand
I can’t take it off
It’s stuck to me
I just want freedom
Free from the mask
I won’t break it off
I cannot see
This man i’ve become
Take off the mask
Hit me if you can
Take it off
Take it off
Take it off
That’s not who I really am
Take it off
Take it off
Take it off
This song’s so stupid
You think this will make them care?
Now shut up, and put on my mask.
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omg umbrella academy you know ball
minasan! im yuuki and i review things sometimes and this came up sooooo review time also this is short because i am short (jk i'm actually sick so i haven't much energy at the moment. gomen. please forgive me)
i feel like this entire poem, the reference to a mask, could be something of autistic traits. and subconsciously wearing the mask, wanting to take it off.
i'm kinda confused by this line? like what song are you referring to here? and what will make them care?
that's pretty much my only critique, although i think stanza breaks would be very helpful here.
overall it's hard to name things to change when i haven't seen other works by you, so i hope to read some more.
this is a great poem though, very relatable. it's very emotional and raw, just putting your feelings out there.
anyway i currently don't have the energy to write more, i hope this helped a little.
yuuki (aka kiki)
"Be careful what masks you wear, child, lest you lose your true face forever."
should've listened to cassandra.
(-TDA, qoaad)
That's really good advice, but who is Cassandra?
*gasps*
Cassandra clare?
shadowhunters? (the book, not the series?)
no?
she's a writer.
So beautiful and so true! I have been through this before, and believe me, it is possible to break free. I just want you to know that you can PM me anytime you need someone to listen to you.
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This poem needs no editing and no correcting. As someone once pointed out to me on a poem that I had written earlier, You can't edit something that is purely the writer. This poem is so personal, and so you, that it doesn't need editing and it can't be edited. And for me, that makes it all the more beautiful.
Sorry if I just made you sound like a piece of writing, that wasn't my goal...
I hope this helped you some, and I am looking forward to more from you!