Hi, Shikora here with a review.
Let's get to it.
I really like this song you have come up with. It's really nice, the works are full of so much emotion and feeling, almost makes it feel so real. I really like the name you chose, I think it goes really well with the words and the meaning behind this song.
But sadly I did see a few thing that need to be fixed, but that is why I'm here.
The only thing I really did see, is that you have know punctuation, and it really affects your song. It doesn't allow us to feel the tune that it's apposed to be in. So I'm going to point out one or to things to show you, then you can do the rest yourself.
Promise me that you will thrive
This needs a question mark at the end.
Promise me that you will thrive
And this one needs a comma.
So I just pointed those two out to show you what I mean, but there is a trick to spotting the places where the punctuation should go. You should read your work aloud to yourself and see were ever you stop for breath is were you put the commas question marks and all that stuff.
Well that's all from me for now. I really liked reading and reviewing your work, and I really hope to see more from you. Never stop writing and have a great day/night.
Your friend
Shikora.
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