Hi there @Luke14 I am here to do a review on this Grate poem, First things first I can say that this is a grate length.
Some lovely lines
Lovely first line to the poem here it is really nice, I feel like there is all ready some sort of connection here, I also feel like the line can just mean so many things.I know you want what’s best for me,
And see the first line and the second go really will I think, the connection to both is really nice, the way they both seem to be looking out for one another.But are you sure this isn’t what’s best for you?
I feel like this is very true and realistic, but I do think that you could say the same thing a bit better I will put this in suggestions to show you what I mean, also you will notes that My line is a bit shorter I will put you line under the one that I do a little withYour just a kid, you don’t know what to think
What I feel needs a bit of work
I do not really get this bit of the hole argument thing it feels like you have gone from trust and being true to every on, and now it has turned into, an argument and seeming to not like each other.Your side in the argument when I can’t choose
Suggestion
Mine: Your just a kid, you don’t know any better.
you: Your just a kid, you don’t know what to think
So That is all that I can say about your poem, So keep up the good work, and let me no if you like what I did with the line that is in suggestions.
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