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Asleep, or Dead?

by Luke14


Asleep, or Dead?

I woke up, from my dream

To what I, thought i’d seen

From before

Who is that? In the herse

So frightening, i’m disturbed

I adore

Are you truly gone?

Has our time run out?

How could i have

Walked away

Away from this drought?

When I could have given it the water it needed

Are you truly gone?

Had I lost my chance?

Did I even know

What I had

Before our last dance?

At your get-togethers I always just stay seated

What if that dance had lasted forever?

I wish I knew how

I am now, all alone

To this seat, I condone

I am safe

If only I, could take dares

Could rise up, from this chair

Never late

again

Are you truly gone?

Has our time run out?

How could i have

Walked away

Away from this drought?

When I could have given it the water it needed

Are you truly gone?

Had I lost my chance?

Did I even know

What I had

Before our last dance?

At your get-togethers I always just stay seated

But in the end, I should have taken my chance

In the end, I should have asked you to dance

Now your gone, What can I,

Do without

You?

I make up a soulmate in my head

When I hardly knew her name

After all the trouble i’ve caused,

Maybe i’m better off dead.


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Hi!
This poem is so wondrous and also very sad...
It's kind of worrying but very amusing.
I feel like this quite often, i feel, that nobody actually likes me and it would be better if i would be dead. And some people make me think of horrible thoughts...But then i think what would others think, if i did something to myself... And it slowly gets better.
I wonder if the ones that do suicides think about others.
This poem is so thoughtful and i think i read it for like 5 times!
It's beautiful!




Luke14 says...


Thanks, i'm so glad you like it. It really means a lot to me. I'll be sure to write some more, real soon!



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Hi there!
This poem is so beautiful and so sad! I love the way you wrote this, I truly do. I understand what you are going through, and what you are saying. I am here to help if I can. Just let me know. My favorite part is this:

"I make up a soulmate in my head

When I hardly knew her name

After all the trouble i’ve caused,

Maybe i’m better off dead."

I have felt this a lot, and it is possible to get over it, but it always comes back at some point or other. I have no tips to make for this poem, because it is perfect. You definitely have talent.




Luke14 says...


Thank you!! And I think it would be goo to talk about this poem's inspiration, just message me if you'd like to hear it.




Minds are like parachutes. They only function when they are open.
— Sir James Dewar, Scientist