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Asleep, or Dead?

by Luke14


Asleep, or Dead?

I woke up, from my dream

To what I, thought i’d seen

From before

Who is that? In the herse

So frightening, i’m disturbed

I adore

Are you truly gone?

Has our time run out?

How could i have

Walked away

Away from this drought?

When I could have given it the water it needed

Are you truly gone?

Had I lost my chance?

Did I even know

What I had

Before our last dance?

At your get-togethers I always just stay seated

What if that dance had lasted forever?

I wish I knew how

I am now, all alone

To this seat, I condone

I am safe

If only I, could take dares

Could rise up, from this chair

Never late

again

Are you truly gone?

Has our time run out?

How could i have

Walked away

Away from this drought?

When I could have given it the water it needed

Are you truly gone?

Had I lost my chance?

Did I even know

What I had

Before our last dance?

At your get-togethers I always just stay seated

But in the end, I should have taken my chance

In the end, I should have asked you to dance

Now your gone, What can I,

Do without

You?

I make up a soulmate in my head

When I hardly knew her name

After all the trouble i’ve caused,

Maybe i’m better off dead.


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Hi!
This poem is so wondrous and also very sad...
It's kind of worrying but very amusing.
I feel like this quite often, i feel, that nobody actually likes me and it would be better if i would be dead. And some people make me think of horrible thoughts...But then i think what would others think, if i did something to myself... And it slowly gets better.
I wonder if the ones that do suicides think about others.
This poem is so thoughtful and i think i read it for like 5 times!
It's beautiful!




Luke14 says...


Thanks, i'm so glad you like it. It really means a lot to me. I'll be sure to write some more, real soon!



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Hi there!
This poem is so beautiful and so sad! I love the way you wrote this, I truly do. I understand what you are going through, and what you are saying. I am here to help if I can. Just let me know. My favorite part is this:

"I make up a soulmate in my head

When I hardly knew her name

After all the trouble i’ve caused,

Maybe i’m better off dead."

I have felt this a lot, and it is possible to get over it, but it always comes back at some point or other. I have no tips to make for this poem, because it is perfect. You definitely have talent.




Luke14 says...


Thank you!! And I think it would be goo to talk about this poem's inspiration, just message me if you'd like to hear it.




Anything's possible if you've got enough nerve.
— J.K. Rowling