Yin yang.

Hello there! Londone here to review your work.

This was a very simple piece about a very simple concept. Yin and Yang, two opposites that intertwine into one very powerful force. You embraced its meaning and placed it into your work, which can be difficult to do.

I had a couple nitpicks, but they may just be me.

I know your intention was to be fast paced, but it seemed a little bit too fast. Like, I was done in a few seconds, and that's not really what I would want in a poem. Usually, anyway.

You probably could have dug in deeper with this, and some descriptive imagery would have been very nice in contribution. But simple can be good too, and I believe that may just have been what you wanted to get across.

All in all, I liked this!

I hope to see more from you soon.

Londone

I really liked it and found it to be interesting the only problem is that somehow it feeels rushed in a sense,not in the way that you rushed to write it and it's done poorly the way I mean is that it's fast paced and feels it should be read in a very fast pace. While I don't really like this it is actually a good way of laying it out because it gives it the sense and feeling of how they aren't in peace separate and then the last line with talks about when they are together feels slowed down and clam,a great way of executing for what the poem is about.

@Flumadiddle