Hello, E.E here for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.
So, the first thing I noticed is that a few places should have commas instead of periods. The lines "told everything's going to be ok", "No" and "Cautiously ". It flowed REALLY well and this is defintley your best work yet. Hope to see more poems like this as time goes on!
The meaning of the poem... well, I know what it means sooooo, yeah.
Overall, I loved the poem and keep up the good work! Happy Thanks- WAIT, MERRY CHRISTMAS, I CAN SAY THAT NOW! OR HAPPY HANUKA I really need to go now Grim has souls to reap and he needs more cocoa. He has a problem, seriously. Cheerio and fruit loops to you!
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