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by LordTachanka, DeerInBacPac


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Italicized: Flumadiddle.

A long wondered question is what the funniest humor may be.

Some say to ask and then you'll see.

But is this true?

I don't know, why are you asking me?

For this I do not know, but if there's one thing I do it's that I took an arrow to the knee.

But, what if you can't humor?

I know I can't humor.

BUT!

What I do know is that

Adopting a bunch of middle schoolers in the middle of a demogoron crisis,

That seems right.

If you want to find the perfect humor,

you must have the right Determination.

For those of you that don't,

I morn your loss, so heres a carnation.

But those that have the right stuff,

You have my sincerest of playcation.

For when you find this desired humor,

You'll be sayin what in tarnation.

Another great thing is ducks.

Ducks, tis of thee.

Ducks, animal of liberty.

Ducks, animal of the brave.

Ducks.

For you see, there are many types of humor.

Shared by you and me.

But what comes to find is that the most powerful of all humor is found inside.

This humor is known as the meme.

This is the most pure of all.

Except the dab.........we don't talk about that.


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LakeOfCancer wrote a review...



This was hilarious! I loved it! I especially loved how in the last line, you said, "Except the dab.........we don't talk about that." That was the part where I died laughing. E.E., this was amazing, I loved how you mentioned your other poem called Ducks, it was awesome! Thank goodness there are writers who will be funny and serious at the same time, cause I needed this today!:)

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DeerInBacPac says...


Don't forget about @LordTachanka! And thanks! If you need to talk, I am here.



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Hi E.E! Saru here for a hopefully helpful review!
I'm going to get constructive criticism out of the way first so we can get on with what was great about this.
@LordTachanka, your first section needs a little work, the sentences were worded a little oddly and the flow was slightly off. Try re-reading it and making sure it makes sense, I don't want to be too nitpicky, just do what you think makes the most sense.

Adopting a bunch of middle schoolers in the middle of a demogoron crisis,

S T E V E
But more seriously, it's spelled 'demogorgon', and if you want to show non-Stranger Things fans why this is actually funny (because reading it without context doesn't sound amusing) try slipping in the fact that Steve is a teenager? Because that's the humor in the meme.
I morn your loss, so heres a carnation.

There's a 'u' in 'mourn', and 'here's' has an apostrophe.
You have my sincerest of playcation.

I'm guessing this is a meme I've somehow missed over the years, but what does this mean?
You'll be sayin what in tarnation.

If you're going to end 'saying' at the 'n', be sure to end it with an apostrophe.
Ducks, tis of thee.

Ducks, animal of liberty.

Ducks, animal of the brave.

You switch here from parodying America the Beautiful to the Star Spangled Banner here, and it's a little awkward, try to stay with one song. If you're sticking with America the Beautiful, try adding more words into the first to match with the syllables from the actual song. With the second line, however, try replacing 'animal' with 'creature' to achieve similar syllabic schemes.
[quote]Except the dab.........we don't talk about that./quote]
There are too many ellipses here. Three is enough. Also, put a space after your ellipses set.

And... that's it for constructive criticism! Sorry most of what I suggested was grammar. This was a cool idea for a poem (I'm really envious of cool poem ideas right now), so great job!

Keep writing!
~Saru

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Hello LordTachanka and @Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

Spoiler! :
A long{-}wondered question is what the funniest humor may be.

Some say to ask and then you'll see.

But is this true?

I don't know, why are you asking me?

For this I do not know, but if there's one thing I do it's that I took an arrow to the knee. {this line doesn't make sense. I would recommend finding another word that rhymes with "me." I also recommended rhymezone.com for rhymes}

But, what if you can't humor?

I know I can't humor.

BUT!

What I do know is that

Adopting a bunch of middle schoolers in the middle of a {demogorgon} crisis, {What is this? this line doesn't make sense}

That seems right.

If you want to find the perfect humor,

you must have the right Determination. {YOU ARE FILLED WITH DETERMINATION}

For those of you that don't,

I {mourn} your loss, so heres a carnation.

But those that have the right stuff,

You have my sincerest of playcation.

For when you find this desired humor,

You'll be sayin what in tarnation.

Another great thing is ducks. {YE}[/b]

Ducks, tis of thee.

Ducks, animal of liberty.

Ducks, animal of the brave.

Ducks. {I would reword it as:

All the ducks, 'tis of thee.
Ducks are animals of liberty.
Of thee I sing.


and so on and so forth}


For you see, there are many types of humor.

Shared by you and me.

But what comes to find is that the most powerful of all humor is found inside.

This humor is known as the meme.

This is the most pure of all.

Except the dab{... }we don't talk about that. [u]{agreed}


My interpretation:



What is different types of humor?

Jeopardy reference yay

Overall:



I did really like it. I believe that you could and should have elaborated more on memes, but the punch line at the end was great. And plus, you included ducks. Ducks are superior to geese. All hail ducks.

Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --

Kara

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DeerInBacPac says...


YES HAIL DUCKS
((Sorry but i had to make the refrence))



LordTachanka says...


@deamonGoddess thanks for the review for the 2 things you didn't understand me and E.E. are big nerds so some of our references some people won't understand



zaminami says...


@LordTachanka

I am a humongous nerd as well. Just ask E.E. I knew the Undertale, Stranger Things, all the references. I was just saying that the lines didn't fit with the rest of the poem.



LordTachanka says...


ohhhhhhhhhhh ok. And yay! Go nerds!



zaminami says...


YEAHHHHHH NERDS



DeerInBacPac says...


NERDS WOOOOOOOO!



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DeerInBacPac says...



@DemonGoddess @LordTachanka @Saruka @woahhitherepal @DarkPandemonium @Steggy @WhosabellCanWrite @TheBlueCat @LittleLee @Lake @Londone




zaminami says...


I call a review



DeerInBacPac says...


you do that



Saruka says...


me too



DeerInBacPac says...


oh DEER
*laughs while Grim stifles chuckles*



LordTachanka says...


Oh my..



zaminami says...


PFFT



LakeOfCancer says...


I have no fricking clue what's happening...XD



zaminami says...


moosen



DeerInBacPac says...


MOOOOSEN



LordTachanka says...


This conversation (if you even wanna call it that) has evolved into absolute gibberish



DeerInBacPac says...


@DemonGoddess

Guess what

MOOSEN ARE TAKING OVER THE WORLD



zaminami says...


MOOSEN AND THE FOODESESEN



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LordTachanka says...



@Flumadiddle





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