All right, here I am, typing on my phone. Review might be low in quality.
First, I love the word play/irony you use in the title. Usually, the phrase is 'extra black', but when Black is switched with Blanc, the interpretation changes to both ways. First, the contrast of Blanc (a French surname that means White, something I look up in the Internet) with Black, and the literal meaning that you get once you pronounce it as Blank.
I have two concerns about this flash fiction. First, the amount of scenarios in it cannot be contained within a 68-words story. Rather than focusing on flash fiction, poetry, and novel all at the same time, the message can be better felt when you focus on one type of writing and expands it. I would love it if you focus on flash fiction: why the MC likes it, his inspirations who wrote it, and how it relates to his character and life. All of these aspects you can expand to make the story more meaningful and pack a harder punch into the ending.
The second concern is repetition. It dominates the story, thus providing little variety to it. Rather than delivering the same message through the same structure, why not change the structure? Play with it, so it grabs reader's attention. It'll be unpredictable and surprising to him, all those delicious ingredients to make him keep writing. This suggestion is also applicable to the second part of the first three paragraphs. The monologue is better italicized to avoid reader's confusion, but this is nothing major.
I get Paper Towns, I get Poe, but I don't get Fast Food Fiction (unless you're telling me it's not based on real life, but is rather a term for flash fiction, which would be an accurate and humorous comparison xD). Overall, this ff has context as important as your others', but its execution is a little weaker. I enjoy reading this, so good job. '^'b
Points: 25
Reviews: 472
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