Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: Hmm...2071...assuming that date that you are putting is he date on which the story takes place that is a ridiculously long deadline that is certainly very suspicious. And I assume this is meant to be a newspaper article judging by the title that you've put there so looking at in that sense it seems to be fairly realistic as a newpaper article. the language used is just the right blend of formal and informal. The only thing that I can say is a little off is the high density of quotes in this thing. I feel like a real newspaper article would not have this many quotes in it.
Anyway let's get right to it,
“MUTTS CALLED A DISASTER”
“SITUATION CODE RED”
That's quite an opening you got there. This one is the most attention grabby one of the ones that I have read so far.
They were supposed to be the soldiers of the future, the saviors of the human race, come to save us from our wars. But yesterday evening, it was announced that all Mutt units were to be destroyed and all documents relating to their research and development were to be burned, along with whatever contained them.
Getting right to the point like this is certainly a great idea right here.
The responses to this declaration have been greatly varied. Most are glad, or at least neutral. After the announcement was made, there was a gathering of anti-Mutt activists in Washington D.C. to praise the decision. Just following them was a meeting of prominent scientists and military personnel, gathering to protest. Dr. Newton Clark, the director of Genetic Research for Gable College in Iowa, voices his thoughts;
This part is also pretty reminiscent of a newspaper article.
“It is outrageous that they should treat this incident as if it were a toy recall. Perhaps there were flaws in the design, but that does not mean that the design should be damned without any opportunity for redemption.”
Those in favor of the decision for destruction have equally loud voices. Edward Park, leader of the group H.A.M (Humans Against Modification) says that “the concept of genetic modification is wrong. Those who thought to tempt God are finally getting their due.”
I have to say that is not a good acronym. This is on the same level as S.P.E.W at being a complete joke of a title.
“It is a large, long-term operation. Please don’t expect instant results.”
The project date for the completion of the destruction operation is August, 2071.
Well that is quite the ending that you have there. Although for a newspaper article this does somewhat short.
Aaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this was a nice little article although it just feels like an excerpt from one rather than a proper full length but that might just be how I see it. Overall it was written pretty well and it sounded very much like a newspaper article. Great job overall.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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