Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Aaand after a long break I am back. Let's try to get to the end of what you've uploaded.
First Impression: Okaaay...That was another twist. Kinda out of nowhere though. Like we have had absolutely no hints related to the government at all. (I could just have been stupid enough to miss them so if there were hints tell me).
Anyway let's get to it,
What he could see was a huge, low-ceilinged room that stretched out far off to the left and right. It was more of a hall, really, with sleek black silver metal providing crisp accenting in the corners and around the edges of built-in rows of shelves. The contents of shelves were nothing like the discarded half-machines in Patrick's workshop, and each shelf had three distinct places marked out by shallow divets for the appropriate item to sit in. Treego wondered if there were shelves separating the pile of cages, or if they were all stacked up like a house of cards.
Nice little description there to establish the setting.
"No!" she screeched - yup, definitely a monkey, "None!"
Okay doesn't make sense that he'd have doubts that Rosie is a monkey when he clearly knows that by that point when he knows the name.
The bat smiled with one side of their mouth. "Niall, male. You're Treego, right?"
Did he just introduce his gender or did he actually mean to say mate..
There was a loud click. Far across the other side of the room, a white door with a huge, wide silver handle opened smoothly enough that Treego reckoned it had to be on mechanical hinges. A short woman with dark ebony skin and long black hair paced into the room, balancing three different clipboards on her arms, one of them pointing a different way from the others. She stumbled slightly as she reached the high, white work table and the clipboards clattered onto the hollow-sounding metal surface.
Nice description again although I'm wondering why the lab coat. She is walking into tell them to go to sleep and not to take them to the lab.
"Treego," Treego said, with the most calming smile he could manage. It was like introducing himself to MacLean all over again. Except this person didn't seem to be getting any more comfortable the longer she spent with the animals. He widened his smile and pointed in various different directions, listing off the names of the others. "This is Niall, this is Phoenix. Then there's Rita, Rosie's down there somewhere. Wave to the lady, Rosie. Er, I can't really see who else is about... Holy moly is that you Belinda? How the heck did they fit you in a cage?"
Whoa....now I wonder what happened to those poor elephants.
Patrick. Treego's eyes sunk back into his sockets and he absentmindedly darted his tongue in and out of his mouth. He was sure Patrick had got through to most of them too - how could he not? But what it would even come to now, Treego didn't know.
And this reminds me. Are they all still wearing their headsets? Were they discovered and removed by these people? Did they remove them before the whole place descended into a panic?
Treego stared at the ground for a moment, not having been this far from it in quite some time. He spent most of his time in a pond, or on a couch. But she was right. He was made to spring from tree trunk to tree trunk in the depths of the Amazon. He carefully edged his way onto the outside of the cage, then lowered his back legs onto the top of Rita's, then shimmied carefully down the bars to Belinda's, still there where Rosie had put it. A moment later, he found his sticky webbed feet well suited to the task, and scuttled face first down the side of Belinda's cage, relishing the tingling rush as the ground zoomed up towards him.
This is such a nice small little detail that does such a great job of showing the effects of them living like humans for some time very well.
At this Marie's wide, worried eyes narrowed and her respectful meeting of his gaze turned into something far more forceful. "I don't know what Patrick McAfferty told you, but that man has no connection to the Neuromax Company, and never has."
And a bombshell has been dropped.
Marie pursed her lips. "In other words, you are in the safe hands of the British Government."
Aaand the plot gets even more complicated. (This is definitely a good thing.)
Aand that's it for this chapter.
Overall: Well pretty interesting development in this chapter. I am wondering whether the more dangerous animals are still being restrained or not, considering the fact that they didn't speak they probably those guards on the mouths were probably not removed but it isn't clear here. Aaand Treego assuming leadership. Good for him. Now if I could read on and figure out what Patrick is doing.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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