It is really good.I like it.There are some thing to it.
In my opinion it would be better as "Staring into the night" I don't really get the "at" in this.staring at into the night.
Why did you put in the "in you?" I don't think it makes sense but I kind of like it.How can you just drive by it, in you?
Which point of view are you using?Oh, you know, you never cease to amaze me.
I love the ending.Its so unique! Well done!His philanthropic spirit, perhaps, is causing him pain.
He's connected to it-in a strange sort of way.
Maybe it's because that field was him.
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