Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
And well....continuing one I guess. (This is getting repititive)
First Impression: Well that was cute how Aurora got worked up over that. It shows a really nice developing relationship between the two.
Just wondering how people feel about Crothers' motivation. Like, he is enjoying winding Patrick up, but do I need more than that? Maybe he could have Patrick's old job now and be on edge about the thought of Patrick coming back and taking it away?
Some people wind people up just for the fun of it. I'd say those motivations are just fine.
Aurora stayed mostly still, just swaying a little. None of Treego's fury at being talked to like a pet dog, none of Dexi's arrogant attempts to slip as much past Crothers' notice as she could. She didn't even have Chip's forlorn frown that the poor thing could never quite rid his brow of. She was as much a panda as the day he'd met her.
Good Job Aurora.
As soon as Patrick stood up, Crothers dropped to eye level with Aurora and shoved her mouth open. He stuck a papery strip in her mouth, though in the dark Patrick couldn't see what colour it turned. Aurora stayed perfectly still as he switched the strip for a thermometer, as he stuck something in her ear, strapped something around her arm. Patrick had to put his arms behind his back in a desperate effort not to wrap her up in a big proud hug.
No I want the hug Patrick. It's not fair that only you get to hug her.
Patrick winced; he knew what was coming. Last visit, Crothers had figured out that Patrick hoped to make it back to his old work at Neuromax, working with drugs aimed at treating behavioural disorders in children. It had been a few small steps from there to Patrick's age, to the rapidly decreasing window in which this could still occur.
Here and throughout the rest of the conversation I think it'd be better to let us come to the conclusion that Crothers is trying to wind him up. Having Patrick explain all of it to us seems a bit much. His references to this happening earlier are okay but mentioning that he's trying to rile him up sounds a bit too much.
MacLean nodded, and moved a little towards Aurora. “I love it. Living here must be wonderful. So many friends, of all different shapes and sizes.”
Sounds like she just might become a major player in this story.
Patrick sighed. “Yeah, I guess. See you tomorrow. And hey, you really did do good, until that last part. Thank you for being so annoyed in the first place.”
Aurora shot him some finger guns. “Any time, boss.”
Oh god I should stop imagining all these animals doing this stuff for real.
And that's it for that one.
Overall: Well interesting character introduction there with McLean. And Crother's too I guess but he was mostly just being rude so not much to say there. Well also this story doesn't seem to be headed in a clear direction. Patrick has to find out how to revert the zoo animals to get his job back seems like the main outline but then Patrick doesn't wan them to be reverted. So it's not really clear what we're trying to accomplish. So far this is more of a T.V. show. Episode 1: Mario Kart. Episode 2: Aurora. That's sort of what we get so far. Well let's see what happens as this progresses.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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