The Secret of Tayburn Zoo: 7

A/N: Fun fact, I didn't realise that copy/pasting takes away any italics in the original document, so there's probably been a bunch missing up to this point xD

Retcons: The sentimental moment between Chip and Patrick from two chapters ago didn't happen. I couldn't find a way to make that make sense, though I did figure out that the reason he agreed to watch the children was because he wants to be on better terms with his daughter. That means that this sentimental scene is nowhere near as repetitive as it probably feels.

Concerns: I am so sorry about how implausible the thing the animals have done for Patrick is. I am fairly sure it would have caused a cave-in. I was just, kind of in a writing frenzy at the time. Any suggestions for something smaller that could have been done for him would be greatly welcome.

Hope you enjoy finally meeting Aurora!

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The panda's name turned out to be Aurora, and she did not in fact do tricks. After a week of 'preparation', Patrick had had nothing left to say to the public, who would be expecting at least basic pet dog commands by this point. So, with streams of visitors passing by along the path behind him, he was sitting cross-legged in front of the panda, the short grass brushing his bare knees because it was far too hot not to wear shorts to work, no matter how unprofessional his Neuromax self would have considered it.

There was a rattling behind him. He turned round to look up the slop at the fence, which a tall, gangly child with short black hair was pressed right up against. The child watched him, eyes barely blinking.

"Hi there!" he called. "Can I interest you in some airball? The tropical bird enclosure is just off to the left there!"

But the child said nothing, and just kept watching him. Luckily, without much of a show to present as of yet, not much of a crowd had developed. But even one spectator was causing nerves to bubble around in his stomach.

He sighed and turned back to Aurora.

"Paw?" he begged.

But Aurora just kept pawing around the grass.

Patrick felt the sudden urge to reach for his phone, but who could he possibly talk to? Scott and Holly were both far too young to be burdened with their old grandpa's problems. He and Helen had been operating on a strict policy of avoiding the subject of the zoo, and recently it had been working well. And none of his other friends were bipedal. Well, some of them were, but they had wings.

And so he sat there, running through in his mind the memory of the day Aurora was brought in and settled down by her previous owners. They'd remarked that the space was nice and open, and seemed happily surprised that she wouldn't be the main attraction at the zoo. They'd given him file after file of information - well, e-mailed - as if he were about to babysit a newborn child.

This memory was becoming worn out, and he wasn't even sure he was remembering it properly. But he probed as far as he could into the depths of his visual recollection for something, anything that could be used as the basis for her act. By the time the zoo closed for the night, he still had nothing.

Patrick and the Neuromax interns ushered everyone out as normal, Patrick smiling as widely as he could manage. A couple of kids even asked about Aurora, but he had nothing to say other than a promise of big things to come, which of course was all lies. It burned his heart to lie to kids. With his eyes to the ground, he stumbled around the paths, navigating his way by memory through the zoo, back towards the panda enclosure.

He had no idea how long he sat there for. It wasn't long after the summer solstice so the sun stayed high in the sky for hours, though the temperature did cool rather dramatically. He was just starting to rub his legs to keep the blood moving nice and fast when his phone buzzed.

A text from Chip read, The others have asked me as the resident opposable thumbs expert to ask if you're thinking about actually coming down tonight. You okay?

He replied, I don't want to face everyone... not yet.

There was no message for a long while, during which time Patrick went back to staring at Aurora. He'd followed her up to near the hut he'd insisted on the construction crew building. The idea was that each enclosure had a hut for keeping performance equipment in, and that the panda's might as well have been installed from the start. Patrick chuckled at the memory, back when he'd dreamt of a panda who could dance, or even master basic sign language.

Another text buzz jolted him out of his sad contemplation.

Well, how about just me?

A knocking sound came from inside the hut. Patrick pushed himself to his feet and crept over, unsure why exactly he was trying to be quiet. There were goosebumps on his legs, and not just because the sun was actually starting to set now. He ducked in through the hut's arched entry, and knelt down in front of a trapdoor.

In a split second Patrick's stomach fell away. His mind started to race away with the thought that the workers must have checked out the other huts for specifications, found the trapdoor, duplicated it. They must have gone downstairs.

But it was in fact only a split second. With Patrick's next thudding heartbeat the trap door flew open and out popped the head of a scrawny little capuchin.

Chip grinned. "Guess what we've been working on all week."

It was spectacular. Patrick gaped like an idiot the whole way as Chip led him down the shiny steel ladder. The tunnel was narrow, and his broad shoulders only just fitted through, but as he patted the sides he discovered a thin layer of plastic coating the walls.

"We know it won't hold up forever," Chip said as they reached the bottom, "But we weren't sure how to work with metal."

The tunnel opened up into a broad, dark chamber with ragged wooden support beams criss-crossing the walls and ceilings. Patrick could barely see anything, but as he crouched down to Chip's eyes light from somewhere - a crack in the trap door hinge, maybe under the bottom of a door he hadn't spotted - glinted on the whites. They glistened with a thin layer of moisture.

"Thank you, Chip," Patrick said, "You've saved me a lot of work."

Chip shook his head. "It's not just that! We just, we want you to know that we're alright with Aurora. We don't need her to be kept away from us."

Patrick smiled, and swallowed a lump in his own throat. "I haven't been... keeping her from you. Not like that. I've been keeping her away from the visitors. It honestly hadn’t even occurred to me that you might want to meet her."

"Is that why haven't you brought her downstairs?" Chip asked.

Patrick shrugged. "I don't know. I guess she can't exactly spill the secret. But what would be the point? She can't exactly join in the video games. She can't even talk!"

Chip stretched a front paw up and placed it lightly on his shoulder. "You have to remember, we're not human, as much as it might seem like we are sometimes. For most of our lives, we didn't talk either. We had other ways of communicating. We couldn't write sonnets, but we had... bonds. We would like to meet Aurora."

Patrick's knees gave way and he toppled back into a sitting position, resting his back against the ladder.

"You're going to need a wider trapdoor, buddy," he said.

Chip grinned and wrapped his arms around Patrick, squeezing him tight.

"We have a place we're going to put the door," Chip explained as he pulled away. He pointed behind him into the darkness, towards a spot at the other side of the chamber. Then he chuckled. "We just haven't figured out where to get a door without you noticing. Oh also, Dexi needs a new trapdoor for her hut."

"Ah," Patrick said, "the real reason you're choosing now to tell me."

Chip's eyes widened in panic, but then he nodded and said, "Sorry, thought you were mad for a second. No, I choose now because we just finished. We've been waiting until we finished so you wouldn't tell us to stop."

Patrick ran his hand through his greying hair. "Oh, man, Chip. I probably would have, as well. You know, just so the ground doesn't cave in under you. How did you even do this?"

Chip gulped and pretended to tug at a collar. "Well, that's kind of a long story. Want to go back up and chat?"

Patrick nodded and the two of them clambered back up the ladder. Well, Patrick's ageing bones clambered - Chip went first and had scampered to the top before Patrick was even finished getting to his feet. He slumped against the hard wall of the hut and waited for his breath to stop coming out in gasps.

Chip was terrified, Patrick could tell from the eyes. He thought for a moment about the hell he’d gone through he'd had the night after Scott and Holly had visited. The image of that first monkey beginning to hold his gaze was still so vivid. That concern, that tenderness. Chip hadn't changed a bit. He would never have guessed then that the same monkey would one day be looking at him as if he was so old he was about to crumble to dust on the spot.

"So, Chip," he urged, "How in the world did you pull this off?"

Chip's eyes lost their worry, and a grin slowly spread across his face. "Well, you have mostly Gerry, the toucan, to thank. It was his idea to get all the birds to carry those spades into Aurora's place. Course, we all helped to sneak them out the toolshed during the day, but the plan was born with the birds. Anyway, obviously the birds couldn't dig with the spades- Oh, hi Aurora."

With soft, padding steps, Aurora seemed to have followed the sounds of their voices and curled up just outside the hut. Chip waved at Patrick to come round to his side and squeeze up, then gestured to Aurora to come in. To Patrick's amazement, she immediately knew what he meant and wriggled into the space, which had really not been designed to fit more than herself.

"Hey, Chip, now that your construction work's done, do you fancy seeing if you can convince Aurora to roll over on command?" Patrick grinned at Chip, who glanced at the ground.

"I'm not sure how I'd feel about- Oh, you were kidding again." Chip sighed. "Well, anyway, obviously Gerry couldn't dig with that massive beak and those tiny feet, and wings weren't going to be any help. So I got on his back and then he carried me here, and some of the other bigger birds brought the rest of the monkeys. We've been digging all week."

Patrick gasped and nearly accidentally kicked Aurora. "But I've been out here with Aurora every day? How have I not noticed?"

Chip shrugged. "We did it at night, after you went to bed."

Patrick's eyebrows shot up. "Wow. For what it's worth, your acts have not looked like you lacked sleep."

Chip grinned. "Well, that's 'cause we're professionals. Right, Aurora?"

They both looked over at Aurora for a moment, who raised her head to look at Chip. A rumbling sound came from somewhere in her chest. And then, in the quiet of a peaceful zoo, Patrick and Chip heard the single word: "Yes."

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kaitlyn
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kaitlyn wrote a review · Wed Jul 08, 2020 1:44 pm

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

And I'm back for more of this.

First Impression: Well that was certainly a surprise reveal right there at the end. God Job sir. You have managed to fool a master level theorist.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Fun fact, I didn't realise that copy/pasting takes away any italics in the original document, so there's probably been a bunch missing up to this point xD


*gasps*

The panda's name turned out to be Aurora, and she did not in fact do tricks. After a week of 'preparation', Patrick had had nothing left to say to the public, who would be expecting at least basic pet dog commands by this point. So, with streams of visitors passing by along the path behind him, he was sitting cross-legged in front of the panda, the short grass brushing his bare knees because it was far too hot not to wear shorts to work, no matter how unprofessional his Neuromax self would have considered it.


Poor Patrick. I suppose no one on the staff knows anything about training animals either?

But Aurora just kept pawing around the grass.


That subtle humor you have in your stories makes them just so much fun to review.

And none of his other friends were bipedal. Well, some of them were, but they had wings.


Technically Chip the monkey is bipedal and doesn't have wings.

Patrick and the Neuromax interns ushered everyone out as normal, Patrick smiling as widely as he could manage. A couple of kids even asked about Aurora, but he had nothing to say other than a promise of big things to come, which of course was all lies. It burned his heart to lie to kids. With his eyes to the ground, he stumbled around the paths, navigating his way by memory through the zoo, back towards the panda enclosure.


Well I do feel really sorry for Patrick here. But I do have to ask. Did no one at the other zoo train this panda to do any tricks?

It was spectacular. Patrick gaped like an idiot the whole way as Chip led him down the shiny steel ladder. The tunnel was narrow, and his broad shoulders only just fitted through, but as he patted the sides he discovered a thin layer of plastic coating the walls.


Wait so it was like a pipe or something? Did they actually get in there and line it with something like that? Plastic sheets?

Chip's eyes lost their worry, and a grin slowly spread across his face. "Well, you have mostly Gerry, the toucan, to thank. It was his idea to get all the birds to carry those spades into Aurora's place. Course, we all helped to sneak them out the toolshed during the day, but the plan was born with the birds. Anyway, obviously the birds couldn't dig with the spades- Oh, hi Aurora."


Here when you mention the toucan you'd expect Patrick to already know that Gerry was a toucan since he appears to know all the animals pretty well. It sounds like that whole part was added just for our benefit.

Chip shrugged. "We did it at night, after you went to bed."


Well he has to be a heavy sleeper to have missed all that noise.

They both looked over at Aurora for a moment, who raised her head to look at Chip. A rumbling sound came from somewhere in her chest. And then, in the quiet of a peaceful zoo, Patrick and Chip heard the single word: "Yes."


*falls of chair*

And that's it.

Overall: Well a pretty nice moment there between Chip and Patrick. Shows their relationship pretty well again. Aurora promises to be interesting so let's see how things develop as we go on.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

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Lib
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So you have to have a *bond* with animals for them to talk??

Asdfghjkl SHE DOES TALK!!! Ahhhhh!!! :0 I love this chapter! =D

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Carlito wrote a review · Thu Nov 29, 2018 2:36 am

Hello hello!! About time we got this out of the green room, huh? :)

I apologize I have not read the previous installments, so I will be looking at this as part of a greater whole. This sounds like a fun story though! Talking animals at a zoo?! I have so many questions but I'm sure most of my questions would be answered if I just... read the whole thing (which I might do if I ever get caught up on these LMS novels :p)

Okay. I thought you did a nice job showing his anxiety at the beginning of having this new animal and not being fully convinced that the animal is going to fit into what he's got going on there. I think maybe the only thing you could add into the beginning is showing more of the regular panda things the panda is doing just to accent the point that so far she's just acting like a regular old panda (and because pandas are adorable).

The tunnel part confused me. First because I wasn't aware that Chip was a talking animal (my own fault for not knowing the context :p). But once I did figure that out, I didn't understand the significance of the tunnel and why Patrick was so excited about it. I mean, yeah it's quite the feat that these animals were able to accomplish such a thing, but why was it done in the first place? If this was explained in a previous chapter, disregard, but if not I'd like a little more clarity about that.

And then she just talks. GO AURORA SHOW EM WHAT YOU GOT. :D

I'll leave things there for now and there's a good chance I'll come back at some point and read the rest. But let me know if you have any questions or if you'd like feedback about something I didn't mention! Good luck with this story :D

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Shady wrote a review · Sat Oct 06, 2018 11:58 pm

Bisc!

I'm so excited to read this! Pandapandapanda Okay let's get started~

who would be expecting at least basic pet dog commands by this point.


So, I get why Patrick and co. would expect the panda to be able to tricks, considering the circumstances. But why would the general public be expecting a trained panda? I mean it could be a cultural difference, I have no idea, but I personally don't expect most zoo animals to be trained. I might expect like dolphins or seals to be trained, and maybe the monkeys, but as far as pandas go most of the time they just derp around and people faun over how rollie poly and adorable they are. So why would the public be expecting a trained panda in the first place?

The others have asked me as the resident opposable thumbs expert


Oh. My. Gosh. xD <3333333

Chip grinned and wrapped his arms around Patrick... Patrick and Chip heard the single word: "Yes."


I'm assuming your formatting just got screwed up, but just in case I thought I'd point out that this is a monstrous paragraph right now. Makes it a bit hard to read.

"Ah," Patrick said, "the real reason you're choosing now to tell me."


Haha he just sounds so much like a dad right here. Like busted, kiddos. I see through you.

A rumbling sound came from somewhere in her chest. And then, in the quiet of a peaceful zoo, Patrick and Chip heard the single word: "Yes."


Wut? ... WHAT?! A talking panda?! Ahhhh. I'm so intrigued now! You did such a good job of like... bringing down? the readers lol. Like here I am expecting this to be a perfectly average, stupid panda and then you lay this on us at the end.

Definitely a good cliffhanger to end on lol. If you had your next chapter posted you'd better believe I'd be going on to see what comes after this, like, right now.

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Overall I think this is a good chapter! Chip is absolutely adorable and I just love the connection that Patrick has with his animals. It's really endearing how much they care about him and how much they go out of their way to try to take care of him just like he tries to take care of them.

I think I might have missed a bit about the tunnel. Is it not just an extension of what they already have going? Cause if it is, then what is the concern about the cave in? Did they just not do it right? I'm a little confused as to why it works in the bit that is already established but why this one is a problem.

The other major logical flaw that my brain refuses to get over is -- where did all the dirt go? Even if the animals had managed to carry out such an extensive excavation in secret and somehow make sure Patrick didn't find out -- what did they do with all the displaced soil? Surely he would have noticed that piling up somewhere?

I think that's all I've got. As always, feel free to hit me up if you have any questions or just want some novel talk. Looking forward to your next chapter!

Keep writing!

~Shady 8)

Thanks for such a quick review!

I think the problem I was imagining is that presumably some professionals from Patrick's old company, or people they trusted to hire, did it the first time, but these are just untrained animals who have no idea what they're doing. That is also a good point about the dirt... maybe there could be a big pile of it in the downstairs chamber or something.

About the tricks, as far as the public are aware, Patrick has trained the rest of the animals to do all of theirs, so they're probably expecting something pretty cool to come from Aurora too. Does that make sense? If so I'll try and make that clearer somewhere.

Thanks again Shady :D

Ahh yeah that does make sense. I kinda wondered if it was just expectations from the rest of the animals being talented but I wasn't sure. Making it clearer is probably a good idea.

And no problem! :)



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