MILK
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Milk is an interesting being,
infact I struggle to see what I'm seeing
it could be described as intriguing.
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Actually, no. It couldn't.
To describe Milk in such a way
is plainly a silly way.
So what do I say?
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I'll tell you what I say...
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Milk is like silky dirt,
it's cold, creamy and heavy.
Milk would look stupid in a skirt,
Or jeans, or even a plain white shirt.
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How can I comment on Milk in such a way?
Well, I can, and that's all there is to say.
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Well, it was certainly irregular!
I must say, I don't think I'll ever read a poem as random as this again! 
Anyway, I'm not going to attempt to think of the reasoning behind arguing for milk, so I'll stick to reviewing the poem.
Absolutely hilarious! Random and pointless, but hilarious.
I'm not really sure I can comment on anything else. It definitely needs some work, but at least it's different!
Thanks for posting anyway, nothing wrong with a bit of "poetic vomit" now and again.
Thankyou Moriah!
as you do! XD
If I'm honest I couldn't agree with you more. I need to thoroughly revise, re-work and then revise this poem again. It lacks structure, rhythm, imagery and a message but I just felt like posting some Poetry vomit
Anyway, I hope it spiced up the read!
Thanks again,
Ben.
Well it was definitely irregular. And your argument was pretty weak. However, I am not so sure your idea works in this poem. Even with it being irregular and free-style, you need some sort of structure. It was very confusing to read this poem and have it make sense without the spoiler at the end. Usually with poetry you want it to make the reader think on some abstract matter, not make them frustrated with nonsense. Do you get what I am saying? I did like the stanza where you talked about the milk not looking good in a skirt. Could you possibly play off that stanza? Hopefully this helped. Keep writing!