Hello, BenFranks! I'm kayfortnight, here to rescue your work from the green room. Overall, a very good poem!
Speck wisps on the flick
Of the lady who carries the air;
She does not care of Time’s tick
And with the end she is par.
The first sentence here is very confusing. Speck wisps on the flick? I have no idea what that is, can't visualize it, and it doesn't even make sense structurally. Did you just choose this so it'd rhyme with the later line? The second line is excellent, giving me wonderful imagery. The third line sounds strange because of the grammer. Did you mean she does not care about? I'm assuming that the par in the last sentence uses the definition equal and at the same level, but I can't see how it fits. I agree with dogs about how you need more imagery to really flesh it out.
It’s the only way the Writer can heal:
He must let the lady visit today,
For she will take the speck and peel
Off all the worry; give it away.
Alright. Again, this stanza confused me. Is the speck of dust the worry of the writer? Why is the lady the only one who can take it away? Why are wind and worry under the command of the same person? Why is the writer worried? You don't give us any hints to those questions anywhere in the poem, leaving it somewhat lacking.
Into the night it begins its flight,
The speck journeys off on lady’s hand;
It does not shimmer to any sight
And it shall never land.
All of this stanza made sense except for the third line. Shimmer is glittering and shining; it has absolutely no relation to movement without another verb. It can't be shimmering it's way somewhere. Or were you going for the impression that no matter who looked at it, it wouldn't shimmer? If so, make it more evident.
Adorn means to put on, commonly associated with clothing. Is he adorning the dust or adoring the dust? Paw instead of hand gives the impression of an indelicate hand, with short and stubby fingers. Other then that, I can't see anything wrong with this stanza.But even when the speck has gone
The Writer will look out once more,
And into mere abyss he’ll adorn
The dust on lady’s paw.
Overall, interesting idea, but it seems like you gave up on it too quickly. The rhyme scheme sometimes strained your lines, as well. Maybe rework a few lines so it doesn't seem you're twisting them to fit the rhyme scheme?
I hope my review was helpful. Keep up the good work!
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