11:11
Make a wish
They all start out a lot the same
The plain numbers and simple backgrounds
A hope for something that seems out of reach
But then, the hope blooms
It is expressed through the additions of hearts or emojis
The hope because a promise, dignified by a nearly worded note after the numbers
The promise becomes a reality
It is lived through, the 11:11's slow down as they are answered
But, after a time, they crop up again
The coveted wish has been proven a mistake
This time, the 11:11 is mornful, sad, full of regret
"To make things right again," "a second chance," "to stop hurting"
The 11:11 becomes a mantra for the sad, love-struck, and hurt
A simple wish
That changed everything
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Your poem is impressive and an exclusive topic.I love the way you have structured.
These lines were realistic:
"A hope for something that seems out of reach
But then, they hope blooms
It is expressed through the additions of hearts or emojis
The hope because a promise, dignified by a nearly worded note after the numbers
The promise becomes a reality
It is lived through, the 11:11's slow down as they are answered"
Although you have made some slight mistakes in typos.That happens,I thoroughly enjoyed.
The content had a grasp and the title even more.
It is a good work,looking forward for more
I love this poem because 11:11 is a favorite time in my family. We have done very special things to celebrate that time, so the topic of this poem is near to my heart.
That being said, this is a new outlook on the idea of wishing when it's 11:11. it's refreshing and invokes thought. i love the natural progression that the idea took, from optimistic to mournful. very clever. i think you might have a minor error in one of your lines.
Did you mean "the hope blooms,"? Also, "the 11:11's" shouldn't need an apostrophe there. You aren't saying "the 11:11 is slow down." this is a piece to be proud of.