Recklessly

Hey there, AutoPilot!!

This is Eros here, with a review for this sweet romantic poem of yours!!

I was really caught by the title here and feltcompelled to read it and find out what is in it. I loved the way you have described the feelings. The pure feelinngs of love are described beautifully and I felt the poem was really awesome.

I loved your style of writing and the ideas are great. The whole poem flows very smoothly and the cchoice of set of the words is also very apt.
The poem is short and that is what makes the poem more unique and beautiful. I personally find it hard to express the feelings in such less words, and I appreciate the way you did it.

Keep writing such awesome poetries and stuff, and we would love to keep reading them and reviewing them.

have a great day/night!
With love,
From Eros.

Okay, to be honest, I have to read this a few times to get any feeling out of it. That's not good. Poetry is all about feeling and emotion. When reading a love/romance based poem, one wants to understand and feel that emotion in one read.

Also, as I've found in other works, your title doesn't correspond with your work. I don't see 'recklessness' until the second half of your poem. And using the word doesn't count. I should FEEL it.

Other than that you did a wonderful job. It flows nicely. Rework it until you or someone else can feel it in your heart with one read and don't have to ask questions.

Hello AutoPilot, I'm Jade and I am here to review.

So to begin, I loved this alot. You don't really see a poem like this a whole lot on here. The title of the poem is exactly what it is about and I think it captures it well.

Okay so, with the poem as a whole, I don't think the words are right. Like, it doesn't flow very well and it is rough.
Also, perhaps change some of the words, for example, 'memory we share' should become 'memory we create'
Now, the poem is a mix of past and present and it kind of throws me off. You use became and become repeatedly as well, perhaps find a new word every so often.
When you say, "You've become my all with every word you speak and every action you make" I think it would sound better if you put, "You become my all with your every action and word"

Anyways, overall I really like it. I can't wait to see more from you!!

AutoPilot.

First of all, this poem is amazing and I really like it. It captures a recklessness that I think exists in a lot of us, a need to love someone completely and utterly.

Now for the review (all of these are just suggestions):

1. I feel like the lines in the poem contain too many syllables and it makes it harder to read. At the moment it doesn't feel like it flows properly to me. Nothing needs to go as such, but if you make the lines shorter I think it'll read more easily.

2. "Every memory we share" - here, I feel like you might want to change "share" to "make," as I feel that it would make more sense to the reader.

3. "every action you make" - again, I don't think that the word "make" fits here, maybe you could change that to "take," or "everything that you do?"

Thank you for sharing the poem with us, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

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