You’ve come to give convenience
Analyse my tone of voice now turn away
You are the only here baby
Who I know can truly set me free from this
But that stuff is only in my dreams
For you are already taken, taken, taken
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Sorry if it’s a mouthful
My emotions splatter all over the walls
I know it’s so dumb of me
To consider you as my partner, sorry
Easy you walk through the crowd
I feel nothing but struggle, struggle, struggle
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
What I desire is something you must own
What I desire is something you must own
What I desire is something you must own
What I desire is something you must own
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Drifting like it’s nothing sweet
Nothing eventful at my school today then?
People look at me for advice
But I cannot solved all their bullshit things
Easily I am outnumbered
No wonder I’m in some trouble, trouble, trouble
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Saying words that can’t be spoke
I’ll be in my room alone
Saying words that can’t be spoke
Look whose brains have just been blown
F@ck a frog....
'You are the only here baby.' Por favor, aprende a escribir Inglés correctamente. Porque yo no puedo ser molestado a escribir a usted por temor a que no se entiende, o incluso leerlo! Porque usted no lee su trabajo posterior. ¿En serio?
Ok?
Otherwise... I love it. LOL
XD
~Bloodink
Hi Adam,
I know that you want to say spoke instead of spoken because it is easier to sing. Maybe you're right. But it's certainly difficult to read, for this grammar nerd at least.So after reading up to here, this is my favorite one so far. I like that it is more conversational, sounds more like you just talking, than the others, and the details that function as little windows into your life for the reader. A few lines popped out at me as slightly awkward:
I think that it would be more natural, and also fit better into the line, to say "can't" instead of "cannot".
On the other hand, a few lines stood out as really great:
This is the sort of thing that only some people could come up with, and it would only sound right coming from some people. It sounds perfect coming from you.
This line reads as kind of awkward...until you add the sorry. The sheepish, apologetic tone is beautiful--it feels like you're baring your heart to this girl and that's a beautiful thing.
Overall:
I like the message. I like the way that you have put it together. I like where the lines are repeated, I like the undertone of apology and of shyness. This is a classic love song with a whole different spin on it, and I like that.
Yay!
~Sare