Whenever I feel good, it's usually not that known
I have varied humour and I, speak in a monotone
Everybody laughs
Whenever I gasp
Not because it's funny
But because it's me
Caught up in the lies
Happens all the time
Nevermind the stutters, coz it's just what I say
Don't worry your little head, coz I'm only half gay
I find it really hard
To understand the stars
I'm obsessed with clean
I'm obsessed with me
Getting things right now
Without a clue about how
And I would love it if you just didn't ever forget
That I am slightly different but that's ok
I am only focused on correcting a wrong
So I shall now sing the Aspergers song
So I shall now sing, so I shall now sing
And it don't matter if I give a shit
So I shall now sing- yeah!
I'm pissed off at you (at you!) but that's normal for me
If I were you and you were I, then you would so bore me
All I want is notice
Attention is the key
I'd do anything
For you to notice me
Hear me? Yeah me
For you notice me
And I would love it if you just didn't ever forget
That I am slightly different but that's ok
I am only focused on correcting a wrong
So I shall now sing the Aspergers song
So I shall now sing, so I shall now sing
And it don't matter if I give a shit
So I shall now sing- yeah!
So I shall now sing, so I shall now sing
And it don't matter if I give a shit
So I shall now sing, so I shall now sing
And it don't matter if I give a shit
So I shall now sing- yeah!
And I would love it if you just didn't ever forget
That I am slightly different but that's ok
I am only focused on correcting a wrong
So I shall now sing the Aspergers song
So I shall now sing, so I shall now sing
And it don't matter if I give a shit
So I shall now sing, so I shall now sing
And it don't matter if I give a shit
So I shall now sing (so I shall now sing)
Heya.
I see you've chosen a particularly sensitive topic... autism in general is starting to become pretty prominent in the public consciousness. Both by autism awareness and the amount of mass media portrayal (mostly tv).
However, this also means there is a line between fiction and reality that's a bit blurred, because a larger percentage of awareness does come from mass media, which doesn't need a fact checker and tends to just do what would either be the most dramatic or the funniest.
The reason I bring this up is because I have a decent amount of experience with aspergers, both in men and women.
I'll be blunt, here: You are not being accurate about aspergers and some of your lines are degrading.
People with aspergers are obsessive, yes. But "obsessive" does not mean they have obsessive compulsive disorder. People with aspergers are more likely to dive into learning everything about one particular topic— for some it's animals, others star wars. A friend of mine who had it became obsessed with marine biology. They do tend to like routine and dislike change, but that is far from the "neat freak" label in this.
As for the way you say they speak.
You cannot spot somebody with aspergers from their tone of voice (every single one I've known in real life has a fantastic speaking voice with all the proper inflects), or their inability to get jokes (although that is a bit more of a tell, not all jokes go over their heads. Depending on the severity, they can get most jokes. Especially when they are used to the people they're around). You can't even tell somebody with aspergers by how they interact in social situations (one guy I knew could pick up on emotions better than most people I knew without aspergers).
They have compensation methods. They go through a learning curve and have tricks on how to look like fairly normal people. For most people? Aspergers is an internal mental process that bleeds through to the surface either infrequently or often (depends on severity).
Also, considering how many people with aspergers I have met on this site, they are far from imagination-less. While you can't say they all don't have an imagination, they can hold just as much wonder for life as the next person.
Finally, the wording.
Here were my interpretations on a few lines:
I'm not sure at all what this line is supposed to imply. You're either using it to describe a mental state of sometimes liking the same gender (which would be an oversimplification at best), or you're using it as a mildly degrading comment.
I read this and, with no mention of what that wrong is, I immediately thought Aspergers was the wrong. I can say from experience of dealing with somebody when they were recently diagnosed, you dislike yourself for having aspergers already. Implying it's wrong in the main chorus (for the reason I mentioned before) doesn't send the best message.
And here you go again with oversimplification.
People with aspergers can be confused about other people, and some do get angry that they don't understand others/others don't understand them, but other people get angry and confused at people, too. And to highlight one line in particular...
My first thought upon reading this was that people with aspergers are boring.
My second thought was that people with aspergers find others boring.
While this can be true, just like with every other person regardless of whether or not they have aspergers, it's not an easy generalization to make in the slightest. A few people with aspergers I know are some of the most fascinating people I know, and tend to be fascinated with people in return.
Overall.
I found that you went too much on the extreme end/media portrayal of aspergers, and forgot they are people. Aspergers has "mild" and "moderate" diagnoses, which behave differently than "severe" and "extreme" diagnoses.
Please do more research on the topic, to get a better sense of what they actually go through. Aspergers is a very highly nuanced type of autism and every single person I've met who has it (I believe I am at 4) is wildly different. They have similar patterns, yes, but those similar patterns aren't reflected in this piece.
And if you're just using aspergers as shorthand for "I don't understand people and I'm mad about nobody understanding me", please reconsider. It is a rather frustrating thing to live with (both for the people who have it and the people who live those diagnosed) that results in a huge variety of people, interests, and expressions.
Hope this helps, and happy editing.
~Rosey
Umm, I have Aspergers myself. I generally feel these emotions sometimes. I went to the extreme end of the spectrum because people wouldn't really understand. Yes, it isn't reflective of my nature or any others, but I wanted it to be super clear what the song is about. I'm using the stereotype created by other people, and saying "why should I care"? So, it isn't all sing-along and jolly. Perhaps I should edit it to make it much more clearer that it's me and not some template as you suggest.
I would do that, because right now it seems difficult to relate to. I can't put myself in this person's shoes, which, to me, would be the whole point of the piece.
I'd pick one meaning and focus on it. An attack on the media or your personal experience of living in a world where aspergers isn't that well known, maybe even focusing it on a few more invisible disabilities like autism in general/some learning disabilities.
Having a lot of invisible "disabilities" myself (I dislike the word, but that is what society has labeled it), I can understand the frustration at media portrayals and the assumptions people make. It's hard. But by choosing to almost feed the assumptions by going to extreme in your portrayal, it gets a bit hard for others to relate to.
awww, i love you're lyrics : )