Muted tears

One may stand within a crowd, surrounded by many people yet feel so alone. They hear the muted conversations of those around them, but never can really join in. We face so much stuff in a day, that at the end we truly feel alone by the end of it. But I have a word to give to your poem- awesome. This poem is a very powerful piece that incorporates strong emotions and imagery into it. It has my attention all the way through it, which sometimes is the hardest thing for some writings to do. Good job with it.

Woof! That was strange!
I am not going to pretend I know what this is about in any way, but from a little look at the review below me it must mean somthing pretty strong. I just like it because it is slightly random, and such things appeal to me. The description is very good, and is easily relatable to.
Well done,
Take That You Fiend!

This is a very powerful poem.
You create a strong beginning with the line "muted chatter" as you have immediately got your reader's thinking about how chatter can be "muted".
Further mystery is created with the line "people clothing". You make me think about whether the narrator is talking about clothing in the shops, or about the actual people in front of them.
Crossing out the line "I'm here" is also very interesting, as you question whether the person actually is there. Perhaps they are physically present, but mentally elsewhere. Or maybe the fact that they are not regarded by anyone else makes them feel invisible.
"Artificial smiles

Wired nerves

Wings on us

Hovering up"

This stanza creates a lot of powerful imagery, as though there is something fake about these people. "Wired nerves" seems to imply that the people are somewhat hyper, or perhaps on-edge. The idea of floating or flying that you depict also raises more questions as to the nature and character of these people.

"Pitter-patter

Raindrops fall

Murmured whispers

A brush against shoulder"

This stanza is full of quite gently language such as "brush" and "murmured" which make me picture a more calming scene. The idea of rain also ties in with that of the crowd- many raindrops all falling together, etc.
You ended on a very mysterious and powerful note, which really added to the overall effect of the poem.
I very much enjoyed reading the poem, as it raised so many questions in me and yet felt relatable for some reason. Your writing is engaging and thought-provoking, keep it up

LOVEEEEEEEE THE TITLE

And I am also fangirling over the formatting of this work before I even started reading it. XD

'Muted chatter

Bright daylight

People clothing

Milling pass'

My interpretation of this would be someone who is people watching. A quick note: it should be missing 'past' I think.
Umm... the next line:

'I'm here' with the line through, suggests the irony that the person isn't actually present. Which is really clever.

'Artificial smiles

Wired nerves

Wings on us

Hovering up'
I am not quite sure what to make of this. Bit I like it. The first two line suggest a lot of tension, and pressure. So that vibe is definitely, strongly present.

'In a crowd

Pitter-patter

Raindrops fall

Murmured whispers

A brush against shoulder ' - ultimate in exclusion and maybe some paranoia thrown in from the narrator here. This is a really interesting mix.


--------------------------------------Passer-by - very intriguing, the lines imitate footsteps to me. XD


'A L O N E' - I think this is the key message of the piece overall really.

I love the way you have written this, especially the fact that it is so abstract.

I would love to read more of this style of work in the future.

Well done.

~BloodinkSeesFootage