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The message you're getting across here is one that can never be said enough. I loved the way it was so simply stated. They were short lines, but powerful statements. The only comment I would have is you definitely need to revise this grammatically. In regards to words needing to be capitalized and punctuation missing. In the thir stanza, the last line I think you could split so that it fit your style a bit better. Seeing as everything is short and sweet, that line feels out of place as it is so long. Maybe spilt it at "Love becomes/the strongest bond/to hold" or something of the sorts. Either way, it is up to you what you choose to do.
Anyways, the second to last stanza is certainly one my favorite. You did wonderful:) Never stop writing.