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Not bad. You conveyed the message quite clearly, but there wasn't much to it...it got a little repetitious about halfway through. Consider using a little more imagery, some sort of descriptive metaphors, something to flesh it out a little more.
Also, there were several instances where you didn't capitalize 'I'. Nothing a little proofreading won't fix.
With a little bit of work, this could be an excellent poem; you have the base (the circumstances), now you just need the muscles and flesh.
Keep up the good work!