when inside I felt the downward I fell
(fell up through heaven and down through hell)
I learned what was not to be known at all
(from books that teach lessons or animals' calls)
from hours alone on downward spirals up
I don't know what to say really, but i very much like this poem. the style is...different...to what i have seen before but i still think that this is quite brilliant. i only wish that it could be longer. i think that the last line doesn't really finish it unfortunately, but in my infinite ignorance i don't know if that would be the point or not. as you can probably tell, i don't know much about poems, but i really love the flow of this peice and i think it should be frontpaged.
What an interesting poem!This was really cool to read- I love the rhyming pattern and the whole topsy-turvy nature of it."inside I felt the downward" makes me think that the narrator has moments of depression, or a mental/internal struggle, and "up through heaven and down through hell" makes me think of mood swings or being bipolar. Or perhaps this is just the human condition- that we have good and bad days. "I learned what was not to be known at all". This line still puzzles me. I get the overall idea that knowledge is not important, that what we have learnt will never be necessary, but I am unsure as to whether or not this is the message you wanted to convey."from hours alone on downward spirals up" this is definitely my favourite line- I like that it doesn't rhyne- it does not conform with the rest of the piece, which enhances its quirky phrasing.Overall, this poem really left me thinking. I love the tone and structure of it, and it was a great read. Keep up the good work!
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