Hi, Knight Teen of the Green Room Knights here to review.
Can I just say that your avatar is epic, by the way.
This was...........
I don't really know how to describe it. I liked the way that you split up your lines and stanzas, it gave it this kind of rhythm that I have never seen (nor read) before.
Your imagery (for example, the line about the goosebumps being like Morse code) is quiet amazing. If there is one thing that I like in poetry besides feeling, it's imagery. The reader is lost without it, so it's a good thing that you have it.
The only thing that you could fix is the large gap between the review box and the end of the piece. It's rather unnecessary.
I want to say that this is really intense, but I hate repeating what has already been said.
So I looked up some synonyms for the word, and this is what I got.
passionate, impassioned, ardent, fervent, zealous, vehement, fiery, emotional
I think that they all work to describe this.
Anyways, enough of my monologue. I really liked this, and you are a fantastic writer.
KT
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