I like this poem as I do all of your works but this one seems a little rushed in my opinion.
I would rewrite-
Gentle words run down your face like caressing rain.
And weaving them together you make a tempest of words
Another thing is that I would put a space between sleep in and awake, just to make it neater and easier to read.
Last of all- this poem is really good but with a little tweaks here and there you can make it even better. Nice job with the title btw Sionarama :3
Sincerely, Creativeatheart
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