Hey!! And welcome to YWS:) So TheMessenger and whitewolfpuppy seem to have all the technical details, so I won't go over that. Overall, this is a very interesting poem, and I assume that it's based on a true experience, which is always cool:) In some ways I think free verse is harder poetry to write than lyric, because even though it has no rhyme, it should still have a good beat, which can be hard to do. I think you did pretty well at that, but it could be improved. Some of the lines are just off. I don't really have complaints on the content, I like that part. Great work, and keep writing!!
Lady Celestia, the Golden Knight
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