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Follow Your Heart

by darkangel_05


Good morning, the feeling of leaving town and turning back around
Oh darling, I'm talking about the one-way ride and the things you'll left behind
Cause I know all these stories
Take them with you as a way to pass the time
And I know all your reasons
Here's to the memories you'll make and you'll be fine

CHORUS:
Cause I don't care if we're miles apart
You really should follow your heart
That is where home is
Go on and chase your dreams
I'll be by your side

There's something so charming about your name and how that color takes my hand
Oh darling, it's funny how I'm once again saying farewell to a friend
Cause I know all these chances
And how you'll find them in a farther place in life
And I know all your wishes
Here's to the places you will see and you'll be fine

CHORUS:
Cause I don't care if we're miles apart
You really should follow your heart
That is where home is
Go on and chase your dreams
I'll be by your side

I'm pretty sure I'll remember you, that girl
With her voice and her brightly colored shirts
And I will keep on smiling for what you're worth
I'm pretty sure you'll remember me, that boy
With his broken promise and this song
And I will say goodbye but there is something you should know

CHORUS(2x):
I don't care if we're miles apart
You really should follow your heart
That is where home is
Go on and chase your dreams
I'll be by your side

I'll be by your side
I'll be by your side
I'll be by your side


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Tue Oct 01, 2013 8:10 am
DragonNextec wrote a review...



Hello there Miss Dark angel


Like the song,

CHORUS:
Cause I don't care if we're miles apart
You really should follow your heart
That is where home is
Go on and chase your dreams
I'll be by your side

Now the Chorus is good It kind of Spoke to me in a way
(none girly way)

Something I've Always wanted a friend to Write me a song or Two
Haha never will happen but hey its All good :P

Anyways I liked this alot
Keep it up :)
Thanks

Dragon!




darkangel_05 says...


LOL. "Miss Dark Angel"? I'm a guy dude! haha. thanks for the review!



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Hello darkangel_05,Dark here with review on your song/lyric .

Since I do not know how the rhythm of the music is, so I just comment on the lyrics c:

This lyrics is actually very appropriate with the theme of friendship.The messages delivered are very meaningful and convincing.

You really should follow your heart
That is where home is
Go on and chase your dreams
I'll be by your side


Good morning, the feeling of leaving town and turning back around
Oh darling, I'm talking about the one-way ride and the things you'll left behind

I love this part,this is a perfect opening for your song.

Anyway,this part need to some improvement in term of diction or the words you use.
I'm pretty sure I'll remember you, (that girl)->A girl instead of that girl?
With her voice and her brightly colored shirts
And I will keep on smiling 'til*('till) my face hurts
I'm pretty sure you'll remember me, that boy
With his black eyeliner and his songs
And I will say goodbye but there is something you should know


Overall,good song here.I just hope I know how to sing this song.Keep it up!
kudos,cheers
dark





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