Cross My Heart

I think that the lyrics is not very original.

One thing I like is the rhytm. It is really smooth and easy to sing.

Hey there!

It's musicgirl here! Alright so I'm obviously going to give you a review so here it goes. These are very nice lyrics, but I think it should be more like a poem. I don't think it really is perfect for a song. Don't take this personally though. The chorus is nice though. The verses just sound more of like a poem than a song kind of thing. It is hard to explain, but you don't have to take this advice personally or you don't have to follow my advice at all. I really don't mind. Well, that's pretty much it. Nice chorus, but maybe change the verses. That's it.


Peace out,
musicgirl5001

Hi! I love these song lyrics, they are very fun! The lyrics are indeed very uplifting. If this were a song I think it would be a very catchy one! Again I love the lyrics and I cant think of anything wrong with them, they are absolutley wonderful! I think my favorite part of these lyrics are the chorus and the line that says " If you want we could ride those shooting stars". They are absolutley beautiful!

This song is brilliant!
I like how the lyrics are somewhat subtle and indirect, and how they're really playful. Though that's just one half of the fight, of course.

If you're going to make this into an actual song, you can use the melody and tune of the words to further convey what it is you're actually trying to say.
Just wondering, how would you want this to sound?

Anyways, I liked it! It's uplifting on my part, and if it were me, reading this will make me happy because at the very least, it's reassuring.
I'm a musician, and it's nice seeing pieces like these from other people! So, thank you! Looking forward to seeing you carry on with your song!

These are great lyrics. Literately there is no constructive critique I can give you because I do not see a need to change them at all, the story makes sense and you have managed to avoid most common lyrical cliches. However I can comment musically.

This is very nice, even without the tunes the lyrics seem to work well. They rhyme, but in such a way that is not comical which is good to your theme. From the lyrics i imagine the music to be proud and uplifting, but being a song, it is hard to judge without the melody and chord progressions. (Writing chords above your lyrics, this example is found in many online lyrics and can be helpful because it gives an indication of a major, minor, suspended chords and also where the cadences are.) Another aspect that i can not judge due to the lack of aural material is if the lyrics correspond correctly to the melody, meaning that the strong words are on the strong notes, but creating a song like this, that aspect is usually correct.

One thing you need to take note on is the form (order in which your sections appear) At the moment i see you have Verse:Verse:Chorus:Verse:Chorus:Bridge:Chorus. This seems that the structure may be a little top heavy on verses as you put two at the immediate beginning and none at the end. I'm not saying this is bad, but you may like to experiment moving them around and see what sounds the best if you have not already done so.

I really think these lyrics have great potential and will go far, as I can see through syllables and structure a formed song coming along. I wish you luck in completing your song.