traveler with a broken heart

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welcome to my thread that will hopefully be filled with 30 poems by the end of April, but let's be honest i'll probably fail. if you want to subscribe and watch me slowly go insane and go through a mental break down like i did last April, that'd be neat.

goals:
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-finish NaPo
-don't put so much pressure on myself
-try
-find my poet again
-write about genuine emotions i haven't resolved yet
-come out drastically improved like last April


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I really love the drawn out "l" sounds throughout the piece and I found it works really well for this kind of hidden aggressiveness. The second stanza is a winner for me, I keep coming back to it and just drooling. The fallen like stones and the authenticity of voice is brilliant.




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That last one is quite the powerful piece you have there, and admittedly I think I enjoyed it better than the sequel you wrote to the garden poem because it packs more of a punch. <3 Keep up the great work.

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I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed and that necessary.
— Margaret Atwood