Come closer, my pretties. (Re-Opened!)

Please?

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(Not your typical fantasy story. I promise.)

I will love you forever for a rip-to-shreds review! It needs a ton of work...

I was wondering if you could please tear this to pieces for me?

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Thank you!

Mmmhhhmmmm.......you know I wouldn't do this to you....except that this one yeilded zero reveiws. Surprising, so I have to ask- is there something wrong in the poem or the language or is it just that I've not been reveiwing much? i wish I could do what you're doing here.......Anyways, I'll remember this:

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And if it makes you feel better....I went back like a stubborn child and finally made some changes in The Fosse Grim. I didn't agree with all of it though. The chat can't severe everything, I say.

;o PennyPenguin! It's LizzyG!

Review maii new Action Adventure?

You're a mod now!
Naiiice.

I would greatly appreciate it if you would review 'Forget Myself' for me. Not so much on the plot itself as I know it's not the best, but more on the style, grammar, whatever else you can find etc. Thankyou!!

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Hey! I'd like a review on a poem of mine:
We're thinking about you

Not too long. Hope you can manage!

Thanks!

That's everyone covered and complete.

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

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Two parter. Hope you don't mind it. Tear it up please.

Hey PA. =)

I'd really appreciate a critique of Chapter One of The Broken. =)

In particular I'd like to hear about pacing, and what you think about the main character (Leo), but really, any and all suggestions will be lapped up.

Thanks. ^_^

Done and dusted, lovelies. ^^

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

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I need this critiqued for a contest that ends on the 20th, so if you can get it done by then, that'd be great.

'ello dearie!


Pretty please?

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Thankie


OverEasy

Done, dears. ^^

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

Heya Pengu,

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Thanks

Ps. I taste like review ? o.0 oh my....

A Shiny Reddish Colour (Second Draft)
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'Ello! Thanks for selling me - uh - us, your soul. There is only one spelling error but that was done on purpose. Grammar I should be able to catch on my own but if you spot any annoying commas spreading like wildfire, let me know so I can fan them out. ^ ^ I'm only curious on what the reader thinks of the plot, the character's traits, especially my MC, and I was kind of wondering what were the first thoughts that went through the reader's mind when they finished.

I just hope this draft is more concise and easier the follow than the first. Any other opinions you can think of are appreciated. Thanks!