If you're interested, know that I'd much rather someone commented on my plot. I've got my grammar problems pretty much sorted out, and I know where my weakest points in this are (which I plan on editing later--as soon as I finish it!!). Other than that, rip it apart!
The only thing is, I wonder if you'll be somewhat unable to help because of what this fanfiction is based off... *sigh*
When Heroes fall and the Sacred Blade is captured, can Evil be stopped?~The Wings of Darkness
"Funny is a formula for which there are a million variables, and it is impossible to backtrack unless, possibly, you make a living out of it."~Rosey Unicorn
Bonjour PA. I hate begging, but I seriously need this reviewed: It has not been touched since I posted it (I think people didn't want to read it because of the title so I changed that). I just need grammar, but if you offer advice in any other area that would be fine too. Au revior.
Boon the Werewolf
Fly, Fight, Win . . . in Air, Space, and Cyberspace. -Air Force Mission Statement-
Integrity First Service Before Self Excellence In All We Do ~Air Force Core Values~
This is the recently edited first chapter to a fiction story I'm working on. It's a little long, I know, but I need reviews. The main thing I'm worried about is that my reviewers can't seem to agree on whether or not my MCs are stereotypical, so if you could touch on that I'd be really grateful.
