Hi there Penguin.
I'd be delighted if you could review this: post460742.html#460742 Thankyou very much.
Sarah
x
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Thanks! I'd really appreciate if you worked on the characters, plot, imagery and stuff rather than nitpicky grammar stuff. Thanks again!
~jas
I am nothing but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's or maybe like pocket candy that's just a bit too sweet.
post903973.html#p903973 I don't need any comments on punctuation/grammatical inconsistencies; I really just need it based on style, content, readability, etc. Thank you!
Idea? Drop me a line! I love to research things.I do mostly nonfiction pieces such as current events, political/ethical/religious topics,and historical/scientific research.If you've a question you'd like answered or a topic about which you'd like to know more,I'll gladly write you a piece on it!
If you're not too busy, I need you to read over this. topic86694.html
I've seen you give really good reviews and I'm in need of a really good review right now. Like I say, I personally don't like the beginning, the diary entry, and I'm thinking of replacing it with a short glimpse into my main character's future - as that is more exciting.
Anyway, I really want you to give this a thorough review.
Do you mind reviewing for me? Thanks I just want to know if you like it, what you like if anything, if you don't like it, what I could do better Thanks! Cheers, thetraveler
You're wrong about humanity. They are your greatest creation because they're better than you are. Sure, they're weak, and they cheat and steal and destroy and disappoint, but they also give and create, and they sing and dance and love. Above all, they never give up. — Metatron
