I'm Hungry...

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If this thread gets buried into nowhereland, and you wish to post a link here, don't let its location hinder you! This thread is set to email me for every new post it gets, so no matter where this thread goes, I'm gonna know if you post here or not. :wink:

What I critique:
--Fiction of all kinds [Action/Adv, Fan, Fantasy, Historical, Non, Science, Other]
--Poetry of all kinds [Dramatic, Lyric, Narrative, Other]
--Scripts
--Art/Photography
--Lyrics
***Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over. ^_^

My basic critique for Fiction includes:
--Grammar [upon request]
--Characters
--Plot
--Reality [Even in Fantasy, it should be somewhat realistic.]
--Description
***Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over.

My basic critique for Poetry includes:
--Grammar [upon request]
--Rhythm
--Poetic Devices
--Mood
--Description
--Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over.

In line for critique:

The King of Hearts -- Buscador! and OverEasy
Ashurbanipal-chapter 1 - part 1 -- Lord Anzius
Ashurbanipal -- Lord Anzius
Call of the Sea -- Rosey Unicorn and Conrad Rice (upon curiosity, not request)

Critiques finished:

Last Demon of Earth -- Conrad Rice
Runaway -- Rosey Unicorn
An Absence of Rose -- Evi
Southern Fire -- Galerius
If Solar Systems Spoke -- Galerius

Hit me with your best shot!

**Heads up! I will not reply on this thread if you post your link requesting a critique. It seems to be a waste of space if I did considering the fact that you wouldn't see it anyway. You're only here, dropping off the link and asking for a crit. You're not searching for a "You're done!" message. If you're visiting this as regularly as I do... that's kinda weird. xD

Don't be alarmed, though. I'm more than happy to give your critique, and the critique should come within two days. If it takes longer, it will be due to a busy schedule and I haven't gotten to posting it yet. It'd be sitting on my desk 'til I get to it.
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I've got a new poem up :wink:

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I love your critiques, Jabbs ^_^ One of these days I'm going to pay you back, just ask.

Anyway...yeah I suppose it's kind of deep. Actually, it's more subtle than anything else. There's something major wrong with it, but I can't point my finger at it. :oops:




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Here are two poems, don't be afraid to be harsh. I love it, that's the only way I know what works and what doesn't.

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Think you could critique this one? I'll love you if you do! :P

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28301.html

~JFW1415




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A poem, perchance?

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Hungry, you say?

Food.

I'd be very, very grateful if you did this one. Be warned, however: it's a Creative Writing Assignment. >.>
Necropolis SB / Necropolis DT

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*Poke* Are we allowed to ask for two? If not, ignore this, but I do love your critiques...

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28391.html

Thanks!

~JFW1415




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Hey there Jabber!

You may or may not have noticed, but a rewrite of Honor #1 is up. Maybe for the sake of old times, you could take a look at it? That would make me infinately happy :D .

Link = topic28646.html

Thanks,

-Kylan
"I am beginning to despair
and can see only two choices:
either go crazy or turn holy."

- Serenade, Adélia Prado




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I know you said you don't really do lyrics, but I'd love anything you can give me.

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If you can't, though, it's fine.
*Don't expect to see me around much in the next couple of weeks. School has started again, and it'll be a couple of weeks before I've settled in. If you've asked me for a critique, you will get it, but not for a little while. Sorry*




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Another for old time's sake, perhaps?

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-Kylan
"I am beginning to despair
and can see only two choices:
either go crazy or turn holy."

- Serenade, Adélia Prado




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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

Revised version of He's Just Human. It's due soon - can you give it a quick glance?

Thanks so much!

~JFW1415




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Not many more of these left, Jabster :wink:

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Anyway, if there's anything I could do for you, just give me a shout.

-Kylan
"I am beginning to despair
and can see only two choices:
either go crazy or turn holy."

- Serenade, Adélia Prado




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Jab Dear,

I know I am always asking... but maybe another?

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Please and Thank You!

OverEasy
Life is for living.




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'Cause you love me so much, Jabbs. :wink:

Part One
Part Two

Thanks! And bug me whenever if you'd like one!

~JFW1415




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Hello dear


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Prologue for you!

Please and Thank You

OverEasy
Life is for living.



It is only a novel... or, in short, only some work in which the greatest powers of the mind are displayed, in which the most thorough knowledge of human nature, the happiest delineation of its varieties, the liveliest effusions of wit and humour, are conveyed to the world in the best-chosen language
— Jane Austen, Northanger Abbey