I'm Hungry...

JabberHut · 2008-04-02T00:15:53Z

If this thread gets buried into nowhereland, and you wish to post a link here, don't let its location hinder you! This thread is set to email me for every new post it gets, so no matter where this thread goes, I'm gonna know if you post here or not. :wink: What I critique: --Fiction of all kinds [Action/Adv, Fan, Fantasy, Historical, Non, Science, Other] --Poetry of all kinds [Dramatic, Lyric, Narrative, Other] --Scripts --Art/Photography --Lyrics ***Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over. ^_^ My basic critique for Fiction includes: --Grammar [ upon request ] --Characters --Plot --Reality [Even in Fantasy, it should be somewhat realistic.] --Description ***Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over. My basic critique for Poetry includes: --Grammar [ upon request ] --Rhythm --Poetic Devices --Mood --Description --Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over. In line for critique: The King of Hearts -- Buscador! and OverEasy Ashurbanipal-chapter 1 - part 1 -- Lord Anzius Ashurbanipal -- Lord Anzius Call of the Sea -- Rosey Unicorn and Conrad Rice (upon curiosity, not request) Critiques finished: Last Demon of Earth -- Conrad Rice Runaway -- Rosey Unicorn An Absence of Rose -- Evi Southern Fire -- Galerius If Solar Systems Spoke -- Galerius Hit me with your best shot! ** Heads up! I will not reply on this thread if you post your link requesting a critique. It seems to be a waste of space if I did considering the fact that you wouldn't see it anyway. You're only here, dropping off the link and asking for a crit. You're not searching for a "You're done!" message. If you're visiting this as regularly as I do... that's kinda weird. xD Don't be alarmed, though. I'm more than happy to give your critique, and the critique should come within two days. If it takes longer, it will be due to a busy schedule and I haven't gotten to posting it yet. It'd be sitting on my desk 'til I get to it.

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Sun May 04, 2008 8:07 pm

thewritingdoc says... · Sun May 04, 2008 8:07 pm

Jabbs, Jabbs, jabbs!

Good to hear from you again!

If you could review this:

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I would be more than pleased.

You rock, Jabber!

Uhmm.. it still has yet to be edited:(
Sorry.

It's kind of a low rate piece for me.

TThanksss Again

TP!!

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and I'd rather play music all day

and read and wander around bookstores

and watch humans

but not be one of them.

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Mon May 05, 2008 3:08 am

OverEasy says... · Mon May 05, 2008 3:08 am

Jab

Chapter 1 of "Listen to the Wind" topic29760.html

Please and Thank You!

Life is for living.

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Mon May 05, 2008 8:32 am

Insomnia says... · Mon May 05, 2008 8:32 am

If you could do this, Jab, you'd have my eternal gratitude. ^_^

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It's part 3, so it may not make any sense to you, but I'm fairly happy with the story in general. I'm mainly looking for one of your grammar crits, and maybe a little character?

Please and Thank you.

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Fri May 09, 2008 12:03 am

OverEasy says... · Fri May 09, 2008 12:03 am

I fear I am always asking you...

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Please and Thank You?

OverEasy

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Sun Jun 01, 2008 5:50 pm

PenguinAttack says... · Sun Jun 01, 2008 5:50 pm

I wish a crit on the revised Killing for Colour, pleasing?

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*Heart and muchas love* Le Penguin.

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Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:06 pm

Lynlyn says... · Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:06 pm

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This is the third chapter (there are two chapters and a prologue before - I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none of them are long). In fact, I don't even expect you to critique this, if you've still got a long line.

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Lynlyn's Magical Critique Emporium - request a review here.

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Wed Jun 04, 2008 3:00 pm

PenguinAttack says... · Wed Jun 04, 2008 3:00 pm

Isa neeeedy. :p

I was wondering if I could perhaps have you glimpse this: It's called "What A Disguise Love Is" topic31101.html

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

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Sat Jun 07, 2008 2:56 pm

BigBadBear says... · Sat Jun 07, 2008 2:56 pm

*hugs* You're as nice as heaven!

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Would love help on this.

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Sat Jun 07, 2008 9:37 pm

Eimear says... · Sat Jun 07, 2008 9:37 pm

Hey- here's a poem, only if you fancy it, though!

Love and food in advance:

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xxx

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Oscar Wilde.

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Wed Jun 11, 2008 9:01 am

Twit says... · Wed Jun 11, 2008 9:01 am

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Thanks in advance, if you have time!

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Thu Jun 12, 2008 3:42 pm

Emerson says... · Thu Jun 12, 2008 3:42 pm

Hullo J. ^_^

God Still Loves You (1), er, and the subsequent parts. haha. There will be/are five parts in total, so yes, I am kind of asking for five reviews but... I love you?

I want as many comments as possible before I rewrite it, so I know what to hit. I'm mostly looking for plot/character/meaning comments. I want you to rip it to pieces if it all possible. I can admit I have weak spots - that's why I'm going to rewrite it again. But I want to know all the weak spots, and everyones opinions, because I bring in my own knife. And I love you.

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― Alexandre Dumas, The Count of Monte Cristo

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Mon Jun 16, 2008 9:15 pm

LoveableLittleSock says... · Mon Jun 16, 2008 9:15 pm

JABBAH!!

Hola! I have an entry up for JFW's contest, and she extended the deadline, leaving me more time to spruce of the entry so I can win! *laughs maniacally* Anyway, the story ends with vampire-y stuff, so that's cliche beyond belief. I know there are 20 billion stories out there concerning vampires, so if you could skip over that (because I've already realized it), that would be utterly fabulous.

And, you know, if you could do a line-by-line, I have cookies and points if you want them. Pretty please? Pretty, pretty please with - oh my goodness. I have to get outside. It's such a nice day! Stupid sun comes out two hours after I get home.

Anywho, here's the link!

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Thanks a bunch!

Got YWS?

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Thu Aug 07, 2008 12:18 pm

OverEasy says... · Thu Aug 07, 2008 12:18 pm

Because I love your reviews

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Please and Thank you!

(ps I miss talking to you since the chat shut down, if you want PM me

)

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Sun Nov 30, 2008 3:44 pm

JabberHut says... · Sun Nov 30, 2008 3:44 pm

Now that band and NaNo are over, I am starting to revive my critiques. Feel free to ask for some and help me get back in shape, if anything. :lol:

Final exams are coming up, but I'm one of those people who can't study for hours on end. I'll need a break doing something I love, so no worries.

So, as my first post says...

Hit me with your best shot! :wink: