I'm Hungry...

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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic39468.html

If you could rip this apart for me, that would be great.

If you're turned off by the length, it's alright. It won't break my heart.
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Hi, Jabber.
*flutters eyelashes*
Chapter 1, possibly? topic39577.html
I am very much obliged. :wink:
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Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic39491.html

I'd love this one critiqued. Only one person commented on it so far, probably because I couldn't think of a decent title for it since it's part of something else, but I would love a review!!

Thanks so much!!
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Thread, I command thee: Arise upon this scarred earth once more, claw out of the sunken dirt to embrace the waning light!

topic45927.html

Thanks.




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Mumbo Jumbo! =D

So. Umm. I have this strange little piece, yes? For Cal's contest. I tried writing it in a style I've never really experimented with before, and I really would love an opinion on whether it worked or not?

Please? :lol:

An Absence of Rose

Kind of depressing, kind of deep, FYI. I think I'm going through a traumatic/dramatic-story phase. :P

Thanks so much!
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Looks like your thread's alive and kicking now!

topic48135.html

That poems needs shredding. Please and thank-you!

And the colab Con and I are doing. Shhhh. xD topic48508.html
A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.




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Hi Jabbs! Here is the story I told you about.


http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic48256.html

Hope you enjoy! :)
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic40424.html prologue

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic41214.html Chapter 1 part 1


Sorry that I put two here :oops: but the prologue is just soooo short. Could you review them?

Pretty please.
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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When a body moves, it's the most revealing thing. Dance for me a minute, and I'll tell you who you are.
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