One of the main reasons I don't care for poetry that much is because I can never understand anything. I did talk to some of my poet friends, and they told me poetry wasn't for understanding the message, but for the images you get in reading the piece of poetry. I really hope they are right, because I have no clue what I just read. I'm having an extremely hard time deciphering what you are trying to tell me here. If this poem was meant for getting images, I sure got a heck of a lot. There were some absolutely beatifull passages in here, and I would point them out, but I'm running a little behind on time.
scream out SOS, for we stare out South.
This made me stop for a moment. I don't know if this was intended, but SOS = Stare Out South. I thought that was really neat how that could work out. But then I ran into that line again, only this time, it was a little bit different and bummed me.
whisper this SOS, for we weep out the South.
I was hoping you would have the Weep out South be something like 'whisper this WOS', even though it wouldn't make sense, it would be consisant with the other line.
If you are curious, yes, I did catch many of the internal rhymes. In fact, I thought they were extremely well placed. I commend you for doing a good job.
So, I don't know what the poem is about, but I got some fantastic images, and some mystifying puzzles, so I'm all game for another one from you. Great job, Gal.
-Jared
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