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i think this is very poor. just very, very bad. it's not even a poem. it doesn't flow at all. imagine that i am in a car. and i am ...

hmm. i like. i certainly do like. it's really a surreal photo album of a poem. it painted a very clear picture of decadence in my mind. it quickly and ...

i'd suggest scrapping this and create something else with the same concept. the frame of this is poor. i'd say make it into less of a dialogue and more of ...

it does seem to be a collection of inspirational phrases. although it can be stream-of-consciousness, it needs a little bit of a connecting strand. i'd suggest starting out with these ...

hahaha, i actually really like this. i came in with pretty low expectations, but this was totally unexpected. i can totally imagine someone like Jens Lekman singing this. it's exactly ...

haha, i would have addressed some of the problems of this poem, but Kit got here first. as i have before, i find myself agreeing with her. and i find ...

well, pretty good! to me, it sounds like some sort of mantra that one would chant aloud, or something of that sort. i'm not much of a one for particulars, ...

i actually disagree with most of my fellows who are saying that it should be more concrete. i know, i've said that poems have certain standards before. but i think ...

pretty good. a bit short, but that's alright. you might want to think of making longer poems in the future. and the rhythm was a bit shaky in the second ...

hmmm. very interesting. it was actually a pretty good poem. you used your words correctly (something that one has to be GRATEFUL for here), and the subject matter was interesting. ...

this actually sort of, in a way, reminded me of a modernized William Blake poem, in that it heavily referenced fantastical realms and creatures. HOWEVER, i don't think it really ...

well. i really can't say much about this. your complete lack of subtlety and metaphor caught me off-guard. but i won't be too terribly mean here. all i can say ...

hmm. this is actually head and shoulders above most of the poetry on this site, which isn't saying much. but regardless, it was a fairly good poem. i won't delve ...

I know its random blah blah blah but to be honest i dont care, all poems dont have to be perfect, like everyone other poem of earth, so thanks for ...

as usual, you have produced a thoughtful work that is epic in its implications. when i first read this poem (that was a while ago), i was suddenly inspired to ...