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Dangit, I was right in the middle of a review and then my computer acted up, sorry if this rewritten version sounds bad xD I really like how you let ...

omg who is this stranger coming to review your piece of literature, lol. Oh yeah, it's me. Back from the dead. Sorry it's been so long x) I'll get right ...

To me this is probably your best chapter because it had a nice balance of action with the girl and dialogue/set up with the detective. If you tried basing the ...

I like the idea of the stree racers, that sounds like it could be exciting. I still have trouble figuring out what this Crystal person is or why that chick ...

I'll give this a quick review before I go onto your newest chapter :) “Wow (comma) you are quick. That Crystal must mean a lot to you if you are ...

Hey Myst! I've finally gotten around to review this :) I'll do my best to help! I usually start with small nitpicks/comments I have as I read... just because I ...

Hi!! :D Small nitpicks (I tend to start with the nitpicks first because if I wait until I'm done reading the whole story I tend to forgot the small details ...

Hi there :) So I think you found the perfect title for your story. It seems fitting as it is about a girl who quickly finds herself in a mindset ...

Back again :) --It was the twelfth time she had woken up three hours before she needed to.-- This line does not make much sense to me --They had walked ...

Hi again! I'll start with just the nitpicks. "Interesting." Vaelko watched as Haleema and Leo disappeared into the city, their arms full of food. "It's a good thing that Ryder ...

Hi, Ginger! This seems to be a really intense chapter, but I'm having a lot of trouble connecting with it because I don't know any of these characters or their ...

Hi again, I'll just jump right into the review :) There were seven of them in the Othir, six members and Agustos, the Capo. The title of Capo was given ...

haha, so Ryder was originally a brunette... I wasn't too far off picturing her like that, then! Very interesting twist making Ryder forget the Test, I would've never expected that. ...

"Its skin was made of cedar bark, sickening green moss dripping from almost every part of its body. The eye sockets were empty, reminding Ryder of a skeleton she had ...

Nice cliffhanger! The ending was really exciting :) Since I read chapter 5 first, I feel like I already know what is going on so I'm not lost x). From ...