written_on_my_heart

I read this again and think"wow".. yet there is still something missing.

you are a great poet.

very nice,but set a little more imagery up for the reader... liked it *****

it was a nice composition I have to say... but it is missing substance. In other words... maybe add somethings to it.... the repetition worked wonders for this piece though.

nothing to hate it for at all... in fact it was okay cept 4 the repetition

the repettitition kept my attention,but if you were truely afraid of nothing, you are contradicting that thought.

greatly loved... i'm jealous now!!

You are a great writer and if you need help just add me as a friend!!!

This is truely great work!! who says a short poem can't be better than a long one? wow!!!

pheunominal!! I loved the 2nd stanza the best... :)

interesting topic choice, but a few minor corrections, as matt mentioned, should be made. :)

I would say I liked it but it made me feel like I was in church...

yes, yes, yes... uh no? the begining was great but you lost me at the end.

I really enjoyed it, you had me on the edge of my computer chair! (literally... then fell off) *****

wonderful, I really must say! You definantly should continue that... I would love to see what happens next!