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I am so upset with this peice...... I want to hear it, now. Lol. This peice was amazing, I loved the flow. The rhyming pattern was close to perfection. "I ...

"Act like all is swell, It’s not burining like a cut"

Wow, I love your poem! My favorite stanza is the third, but I also like the rest of the poem. But a few nit-picks I found...but I they were ones ...

First I must compliment you on your simple yet bold title, the reason I clicked on your poem. "How I thought I've learned my lesson"

Umm... AMAZING!!!! I cant really "critique" this so I am just going to tell you why this is soo amazing!! The emotion is bold, it grabs the reader, makes them ...

Kind of cliche, and the ending line. "I hope you really do, Too." kind of lost me it makes sense, just doesnt fit or flow as much. My biggest problem ...

"It's the first day of school. A new building,new hopes. I walk the hallways. Alone in a sea of children.I follow a crowd of familiar faces, and wind up in ...

I love the beginning, it's strong and flows very well! But I think the emotion of this poem could be expressed in more detail and length. If you added some ...

Hate to be mean or rude, but this is MY POEM!!!!!!!! But I titled it "Just to Let You Know" I am VERY upset that you have STOLEN my work, ...

I would like to see it extended since its so good but, the feeling of being lonely gets through nicely and the imagery is simply explicit. Thank-you for writing this, ...

Umm... I may be wrong but does the narrator kill the people that hurt the one he/she loves...cause you say "No one can bring back the dead to here the ...

First, I hope this is not a feeling you've had even though I am sure it is since, the pain in this poem is hard to fake. This is a ...

First is first, attitude. If you are planning to write a good story, then you have to be confident. If not, you will only end up crumpling it up(in this ...

If you are trying to keep the MC's emotions withdrawn, be very careful because it can seem like the character has no feeling, therefore the reader resents the MC. Maybe, ...

"I am kicked back down after a relentless attempt. The monster goes unharmed; it doesn't even limp."