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Wow, I really loved this! Great description, story line, word usage, flow, everything! Great job on this! My favorite parts were "one-two-three, one-two-three." "My skirt, a violet blade, cut through ...

I like this. The metaphoric view I appreciate and am interested in. I like the first few lines very much! Good read! As for critique, the poem felt a little ...

I'd really like to see a better flow in this poem. A reader is more likely to keep reading and understand the piece better if it has a constant rhythm ...

I liked this poem actually. It did amp me up for review day! My favorite line was "Green, and then Yellow, and Blue if they're daring" My critique would be ...

Wow, this is an intense poem. It sends the reader into sheer shock. I love the metaphors you used in this. It is quite brilliant. I love how you used ...

I agree with the review below. I'd also like to see better grammar, punctuation, and capitalization. Along with more detail, not only on the subject, surroundings, emotions, and characters, but ...

I love the idea of this short story, I've never seen a piece about this. I love all the perspectives you could see in this work of art. You included ...

I really love this story. Such a brilliant idea written with overbearing passion. Truly a good read. I love how this is a full story in poetry form; you have ...

Wow, I loved some of the metaphors you used in this. Great work! It was full of suspense, I kept wondering what would happen next and trying to analyze each ...

I loved this! Favorite parts were: "left an infinite ache in my lungs" "Her hair was baby powder. her lips, two petals dressed in dew" "sin smells more like vanilla ...

I liked it. I wish you were a little more vivid with your words, though. I think you needed to describe the moment more before you brought up making love. ...

This is quite intense. I like the idea behind it, it's fascinating. It felt as though I was reading it out of a news article.

I like the story you're telling. It attracts the mind. It's very intense. c: The only thing I see that could be helped is your flow, but, you're still quite ...