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Re: Ten Seconds
YOOOOOOOO This was like a super good poem first of all. Your style of writing is really easy to read and just understand what is happening, the exact opposite of ...
Aug 31, 2017 -
Re: Beautiful Chaos of Us
Oh the pictures are a nice touch, I like it. How did Scarlet, the savior of the world, know that everything would be alright if she felt like she wasn't ...
Aug 31, 2017 -
Re: A Series of Letters
Holy cow this is a real cool idea. Negative thoughts almost seemed comforting to me, and I'm not sure if that was intentional or not. You feel alone because I ...
Aug 31, 2017 -
Re: Engulfed- Chapter one
Strong start to this story in my opinion. It has a lot of good imagery making it easy to picture exactly what is happening. I was definitely not expecting him ...
Mar 22, 2017 -
Re: 103 days until July
Yeah this was super good. It kind of reminded me of one of those slow piano ballads with a singer who sounds very sad. From my impression the narrator was ...
Mar 22, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 1 (coment name suggestions for the book please)
Hello, Cool First sentence, I thought it was a pretty good hook. I also liked the concept of the characters being able to talk to each other at all times ...
Mar 22, 2017 -
Re: I Am Glad You Are Gone
Hello! There is a lot of emotion built into this poem, which I think is awesome. It felt like a huge release of just all this emotion that had built ...
Sep 14, 2016 -
Re: Young!- Chapter 1: story by the fire
I really enjoyed the atmosphere in this chapter. It felt like something out of pirates of the Caribbean almost. I could easily picture him sitting in the tavern spinning a ...
Sep 14, 2016 -
Re: The Myth- Chapter one; Welcome to my life.
Hello, To start off I just want to say that I think you have written a character that is very easy to relate to, at least to me. Not wanting ...
Sep 14, 2016 -
Re: Do you understand now?
Not sure if this is what you're going for, but it feels more like a play than a novel, not that there is anything wrong with that. A lot of ...
Sep 14, 2016 -
Re: Kambili:Chapter two and three
Ill split my review into two parts just like you did :) Two: I'm definitely starting to recognize the connection the two girls have together, at least what they used ...
Sep 7, 2016 -
Re: Silent Pleas
That was pretty funny haha. But does getting your hair cut ever really hurt this bad? Also the only kind of clutch I know is a car clutch. Maybe different ...
Sep 7, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 1.1 (Unknown Title)
Hello, I thought this was a good first chapter overall. I didn't really care for the opening paragraph. I thought it felt a little too much like a book report ...
Sep 7, 2016 -
Re: Kambili:Chapter one
I thought this was a really really good first chapter. I feel like I could see in my head exactly what was happening because your imagery was amazing. It allowed ...
Sep 7, 2016 -
Re: Chapter one
First of I would just like to say that I was very excited for this after reading the prologue. I liked the imagery seen in the beginning of the chapter. ...
Sep 3, 2016
