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  • Poetry » Realistic, Lyrical Re: Ten Seconds

    YOOOOOOOO This was like a super good poem first of all. Your style of writing is really easy to read and just understand what is happening, the exact opposite of ...

    Aug 31, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Beautiful Chaos of Us

    Oh the pictures are a nice touch, I like it. How did Scarlet, the savior of the world, know that everything would be alright if she felt like she wasn't ...

    Aug 31, 2017
  • Short Story » Realistic, Culture Re: A Series of Letters

    Holy cow this is a real cool idea. Negative thoughts almost seemed comforting to me, and I'm not sure if that was intentional or not. You feel alone because I ...

    Aug 31, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: Engulfed- Chapter one

    Strong start to this story in my opinion. It has a lot of good imagery making it easy to picture exactly what is happening. I was definitely not expecting him ...

    Mar 22, 2017
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: 103 days until July

    Yeah this was super good. It kind of reminded me of one of those slow piano ballads with a singer who sounds very sad. From my impression the narrator was ...

    Mar 22, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Romantic Re: Chapter 1 (coment name suggestions for the book please)

    Hello, Cool First sentence, I thought it was a pretty good hook. I also liked the concept of the characters being able to talk to each other at all times ...

    Mar 22, 2017
  • Poetry » General, General Re: I Am Glad You Are Gone

    Hello! There is a lot of emotion built into this poem, which I think is awesome. It felt like a huge release of just all this emotion that had built ...

    Sep 14, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Young!- Chapter 1: story by the fire

    I really enjoyed the atmosphere in this chapter. It felt like something out of pirates of the Caribbean almost. I could easily picture him sitting in the tavern spinning a ...

    Sep 14, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Myth- Chapter one; Welcome to my life.

    Hello, To start off I just want to say that I think you have written a character that is very easy to relate to, at least to me. Not wanting ...

    Sep 14, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Do you understand now?

    Not sure if this is what you're going for, but it feels more like a play than a novel, not that there is anything wrong with that. A lot of ...

    Sep 14, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Narrative Re: Kambili:Chapter two and three

    Ill split my review into two parts just like you did :) Two: I'm definitely starting to recognize the connection the two girls have together, at least what they used ...

    Sep 7, 2016
  • Poetry » Humor, Horror Re: Silent Pleas

    That was pretty funny haha. But does getting your hair cut ever really hurt this bad? Also the only kind of clutch I know is a car clutch. Maybe different ...

    Sep 7, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Chapter 1.1 (Unknown Title)

    Hello, I thought this was a good first chapter overall. I didn't really care for the opening paragraph. I thought it felt a little too much like a book report ...

    Sep 7, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Narrative Re: Kambili:Chapter one

    I thought this was a really really good first chapter. I feel like I could see in my head exactly what was happening because your imagery was amazing. It allowed ...

    Sep 7, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: Chapter one

    First of I would just like to say that I was very excited for this after reading the prologue. I liked the imagery seen in the beginning of the chapter. ...

    Sep 3, 2016


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