thewritingdoc

I really like the imagery in this piece! There is a lot of it, and it is quite vivid. Just a few nitpick things... "the crisp, crackling pages / Unleashing ...

Hi, thewritingdoc is here to give you a review. "We sat in the leathers seats our principle had provided for us wondering if the choice I had made was the ...

Of course, I was a little confused because I haven't read chapters 1 or 2, but darn, I am impressed with your writing style! Not only does this concept seem ...

There's a lot of emotion here! This has the potential to be a good piece, however, you need to fix it up grammatically. I highly recommend a website called Grammarly.com. ...

The title of this poem is creative and it's a cute concept. However, it feels very... childish. I hope that's what you were going for. The rhyming is a little ...

I haven't read parts 1-4, so I'm kind of lost, but I like the general gist of what I have gleaned from reading this part. The beginning is great - ...

Firstly, your title intrigued me - it's very, very good. Secondly, your opening line is just beautiful. Thirdly, there is some stunning imagery here - "We held each other in ...

This is sad - but not overwhelmingly sad, the way that it should be. I don't fully understand how the tremors are connected to the suicide - are they even ...

Hey ReisePiecey! I don't believe we've met, I'm Tennis :) First of all, I really enjoyed this piece, but it made me feel a little depressed (which means you have ...

I love this piece! Reminds me of a poem I wrote years and years ago called "Song in my Head" (I think I was 11 or 12 - it's published ...

This poem started out well and ended really well, but I have some suggestions for tweaks throughout. "Everyones blind, including myself and I, / no one asking the obvious question, ...

Ohhhhh, this poem took a deep and dark twist at the end - I love that! Firstly, you need to re-evaluate your choice of grammar in this piece. Although you ...

Wow! I love this piece - it is so maniacal yet fun at the same time. First of all, I like your hook. The rhyming is excellent at the beginning ...

Interesting use of the repetitive phrase "yet not". I like this piece, because it presents a tired message in a unique way. There's some imagery here, especially in 6, but ...

I like this piece because it's simple but provides the reader with a powerful image. I also don't think it needs to be 16+, PG-13 is probably appropriate for this ...