thehotinpsychotic

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! First, some nitpicks. "Bright beams of incandescent light blindingly into my eyes." You need a verb before the word "blindingly", since it's an adjective. Also ...

Hey there, thehotinpsychotic here to review! At the line after Arizona's poem where it describes her as delicate, I feel like at the sentence "They didn’t know they were pulling ...

Hey there, thehotinpsychotic here to review! So, some little mistakes are at "What the fuck you dick?" You should put a comma in between fuck and you, otherwise it interrupts ...

Hey, thehotinpsychotic here to review! So, you have a great thought with this one, and it's a rarely explored topic, so hats off to you. One little thing that struck ...

Thehotinpsychotic here to review! So, there wasn't any major problems with this story, other than tiny typos. I really like the direction it went in, especially because the whole vampire+romantic ...

So, I really like this piece. I love the line where you describe his voice as having hidden laughter, especially because voices can be so hard to describe intelligently and ...

So, the line "Scars upon my conscience, though they try", struck me as not fitting the flow of the poem and causing it to stutter a bit. The rest went ...

thehotinpsychotic is here to review! At the beginning, when you use moan and groan near each other, it seems a little awkward. You might want to space the usage of ...

I like how realistic the main character's feelings are; about how she doesn't feel brave or heroic. I don't know if you've ever read the Fault In Our Stars, but ...

This was an adorable story. The only wrong things are that you can't have a cardiac arrest, the subject and verb don't agree. You go into cardiac arrest, and have ...

So, this was a really great story. My only nitpicks are that the story was a tad rushed, and the little girl in a horror was slightly cliche. Also, two ...

I love the gruesome turn the story took! I also like how we see both perspectives, from the ambivalent and haughty boy to the clueless and innocent girl. My only ...

Your sentences seem a little choppy. The inconsistency makes it a little hard to read; the flow isn't quite right. It sounds more like you're just stating things than writing. ...

I feel like this was an essay that needed to be written. I saw something on Tumblr about what's going on with gay laws in Russia, and I was disgusted. ...

So I can't say I have any critique for this. I'm not the best at reviewing poetry, so this will likely be a list of compliments. I love how real ...