thedelphinater

This was good. So far as all the prefaces I've read, this was certainly one of the better ones. It gives the reader an idea of what the story is ...

This was good. I liked the way you portrayed time, and I liked the whole concept. I liked how you portrayed time as something almost human, but not quite. Like ...

I'll just get my one little nit-pick out of the way first: performing an assortment of chores around his parent’s residence. I think it should be parents', because there's more ...

Hi! You're new here, so I'll try to be fairly normal and not scare you away! :P Heat raining down fromt the sun as it lights up the sky. This ...

Hi! You're a new member, so I'll try to seem fairly normal and not scare you away. :P What were you before you came to me? Were you the treasure ...

This was good. The only other two things I noticed were the rhyme scheme and punctuation. You had punctuation, but it was very boring. Every. Line. Ended. In. A. Period. ...

I liked this, and yet I kind of didn't. I'm trying to think how to explain this without sounding mean or anything. See, I can relate, and these are often ...

This was good. I liked the imagery, and I couldn't find anything that was really wrong with it. Just two little things I noticed: And the stars loving gaze. Should ...

This was good and made me feel, well, happy. Sometimes you just need to remind yourself that even though things are tough at the moment, life isn't all that bad. ...

Hmm, I'm not really sure how I feel about this one. I get what you're saying, and to some level I agree with it. I agree with you in the ...

Oh I really liked this and can totally relate. I don't have glasses, but I'm basically one of those people that isn't even on the social pyramid, much less on ...

This was good. Just a few little things though. The poem starts out really strong, and then it sort of starts to not exactly fall apart, that sounds to dramatic ...

Wow. This was amazing. I'm not very good at critiquing, but I honestly could not find any major flaws. The flow was perfect, as well as all that other grammar/punctuation ...

Um, I'm not quite sure what to say about this, other than I think it's in the wrong section. I wouldn't exactly consider it poetry for lack of basically any ...

Ooh I really liked this, too! I can't do very much of a critique, because there wasn't very much I found wrong, and Evi already said most of the things ...