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I've decided not to finish this. Does anyone know how I can delete this?

As dark as THE devil. In my opininon, there shouldn't be a comma after His skin so coarse. I like its message. Good imagery.

I like it, but maybe you shouldn't end two sentences at the end with it is.

Some lines you capitalize the first letter and others you don't. Maybe it's just me, but I think you should capitalize them all. I like the poem alot. Great job.

Adam = Alan Kayla=Kayti, Kacy, Kara Seek N Destroy=D.C.? Seth=Swenson Aaron=Eric Logan=Lincoln

i got bit by an ant today too!

I ike it, though all the spelling and grammatical errors were distracting. Edit before you post, please. :) Welcome to YWS, good luck.

you shouldn't give paragraph 3 with long ago. You've already stated that it was a long time ago. I liked it a lot and couldn't find any spelling errors. I ...

I think you should split "the thunder leaves the sun comes only to find" into two lines between leaves and the. Really good poem.

Love it!!

There's something to be said for short poems, but I think it might be a little too short, it feels like it's a part of a longer poem. Excellent word ...

I think it might flow better if it was: Be it France or England or countries laden with snow. But other than that, it's pretty good.

In my opinion it should be IT'S just an empty shell and ITS eves are closed, ITS soft lips parted Just my opinion

The last stanza doesn't have enough syllables. You could change it to: As I fantasize about the endless possibilities, Of the day when we will meet Of course, its just ...

I like how you pointed out human imperfections without being anti-humane. I think it's cool how you switched around the roles of humans and monsters; making the humans the persecuters ...