Published June 15, 2011
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^ I can't even explain how much I love this is a "Little Poem" and the friend liked short sentences -- wait, does that makes sense? (hopefully it does to you) Anyway, I just love this poem and I can't wait to read more of your work!
Keep it up!
~JustMeNathalie
This is really good. I like it.
Howdy there!
I've read the poem several times over, and I have to say, it's one interesting poem you've got there. Although it is really short, it is neat and well kept. What I mean is it doesn't need to be longer. It's merely stating a point through the use of poetry and I really liked that.
I love the layout and presentation, the use of italics makes it so much more easier to read, and makes it stand out the page, attracting the readers attention which is always important.
Although I do have to agree with tgirly you shouldn't end the last two lines with the same few words, it stops the flow and it sounds forced.
Other than that really well done!
I like it, but maybe you shouldn't end two sentences at the end with it is.