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Some lines you capitalize the first letter and others you don't. Maybe it's just me, but I think you should capitalize them all. I like the poem alot. Great job.
This is a very beautiful poem. I have one suggestion on the wording, though. Where you say "be careful in your tread," maybe you could replace it with, "be careful where you tread." It just sounded a little odd to me. I'm sorry if I'm being obsessive
Otherwise, it's a very beautiful poem. Keep writing, I'm eager to read more of your work!
I think this is one of my favourite poems i've read on here.
The rhythm and full rhyme make it flow magnificently, and your imagery is enchanting. I'm not entirely sure of exactly what it's about , but i have my theories...
Just one little thing i'd mention:
I feel like this final line perhaps needs an extra beat to make it flow with the rest of the poem. Having said that, this is my favourite stanza.
I look forward to seeing more from you!